Broken

Broken

A Poem by shallimarRose

Broken

 

Looking at the old cabin

a sadness comes over me

shades of grey overpower the sun

shadows fall on broken memories

and dreams scatter in the breeze

Wood cracks and peels

termites take their toll

 flowers have withered and died

weeds tumble in the wind

Yet somehow from deep within

I see one green vine

reaching her tiny leaves toward the sun

I am reminded

Life goes on

 

bj smith

aka shallimarRose

 

 

 

 

For more shallimarRose Poetry titles visit my table of contents in my blog...

 

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© 2013 shallimarRose


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yes, life goes on, but the pain of loss also goes on.... sometimes for way to long... your images are starkly sad Rose.. even that small green vine, if not nurtured, watered and receptive to the warmth of the sun will also wither... so, please stretch further, strengthen and grow... damn the termites!!! ---redzone

Posted 11 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you Redzone for coming to read and your wisdom.. Rose



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yes, life goes on, but the pain of loss also goes on.... sometimes for way to long... your images are starkly sad Rose.. even that small green vine, if not nurtured, watered and receptive to the warmth of the sun will also wither... so, please stretch further, strengthen and grow... damn the termites!!! ---redzone

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you Redzone for coming to read and your wisdom.. Rose
Yes, in broken places there are hopeful traces. Your poem inspired me to write this gift poem for you:

Life

In spite of trouble,
there are surprises.
Up from burnt stubble
a forest rises.
Out from old rubble
life mobilizes.
Inside its bubble,
life crystallizes.


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

yes.. I do that too.. No you should take it and keep going with it.. post it it may well inspire or .. read more
Aethereal

11 Years Ago

If you insist, then I'll keep this poem as my own, but I'll need to develop it more before posting i.. read more
shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Nice touch.. my rr are off when its finished send me the link.. xo
Where there is a bit of life there is hope!! Always remember this my friend!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you Sheila for stopping by to read.. xo Rose
R...quite get this. Good free verse and a nice read. One very small thing...'...Wood cracks and peels...'. Maybe you meant 'Wood cracks and paint peels'. Just a suggestion...bobc

Posted 11 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you Bob.. I do believe wood also splinters and peels.. I will think about the change.. I do se.. read more
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ron
That was beautiful and sad. The green vine will grow to its full bloom in your heart. Be tender with it for it surly wants to grow in your cabin.

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shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you Ron for stopping to read.. xo Rose
ron

11 Years Ago

Your welcome Rose xo

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shallimarRose
shallimarRose

F W, WA



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I am a singer, writer, poet, dreamer, believer..... I am an unconventional poet who has been writing rhyme since the age of five. I enjoy all styles of poetry. I write by ear not syllable count .. more..

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