When all is said and done

Never try to time erase,

keep the faith and slow the pace

Times too short I comprehend,

far too short from birth to end

Bewildered by the pages turning,

I find the calendar less discerning

The little things I took for granted,

I'm faced with now, the less enchanted

For time does surely take it's toll,

In Just one blink we'll all be old

In just one second things can turn,

So try your best to lessons learn

Tell your children every story,

Smell the rose and morning glory

Seize the moment when it's right,

Don't give up a worth-while fight

Have a dream? You must pursue it,

Don't just talk about it, do it

Times too short to play around,

It sneaks up on you, not a sound

If music's playing dance the dance,

Don't sit out and lose your chance

Don't forget to be forgiving,

Life is short but still worth living

Keep each promise that you make,

Learn to give and not just take

Treasure each and every day,

It won't be long, they slip away

When all is said and done it's known,

You'll reap the seeds of which you've sown

© bj smith

aka shallimarRose

 

 

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Author's Note

thoughts welcome.. sR

Reviews

[ANTO]

Learn to give and not just take...
We can get so much more from giving ShallimarRose as long as its not seen as giving for givings sake then people are often blown away by the gesture, their response in itself gives back - its WIN-WIN as they say...

A fine set of guidelines - I hope thats not being too analytical and cold - for living
X

[shallimarRose]

Thank you very much for reading and the very nice review Anto.. I agree .. Rose

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Wow, beautifully impactful piece... your execution was flawless!

[shallimarRose]

Thank you hero.. I have quite a few in this run-on style I need to bring over here.. Glad you enjoyed.. Rose

[Rene Velez]

It resonates well, an empowering write with a good flow, well done.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Rene.. Again I am pleased to have you read and review.. Rose

[redzone]

one thought really... an old Native American saying goes something like "you will be known by the tracks you leave". something also worth pondering about an finite life within the infinite swirl of a mater in motion universe. Thanks Shallimar for sharing your thoughts, enjoyed the poem and the thinking... ---redzone

[shallimarRose]

Thank you redzone for reading and your thoughts.. xo Rose

[Dr. Wood ?]

yes....a good lesson in how to do things RIGHT....If only we all could learn it, wouldn't the world be a better place?

Greed is the killer...always has been and always will

Lovely poem by the way Rose....

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Dr Woods , an honor to have you and David come to read here.. xo Rose

[David Lewis Paget]

I like this, Rose, though I find that with these pieces that form one continual block, instead of being broken down into stanzas, they become quite 'breathless' in effect. That stanza break allows one to pause slightly, before taking in the next.
Just a couple of points, lines 3 & 4 should be 'too' short', not 'to'. Line 9 is 'surely' not 'surly'. Line 16, 'worth-while' should be hyphenated, and finally, the last word, 'sewn' (needle and thread) should surely be 'sown', (planted). Otherwise, great.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you so much David for catching those.. I will go in and fix them.. I bring these from my dinosaur of a desktop and I often forget to ck them or the spell check changes a word and I dont realize it.. Some of my work I do in line breaks and some not. It kind of depends on my topic and mood. this one I felt was stronger without the breaks.. Thanks for reading and the nice review.. your thoughts always welcome here.. xo Rose

[David Lewis Paget]

Bill Gates has a lot to answer for, Rose. His programs constantly interfere with what you're typing, as if he knows best, and I find that absolutely maddening. I especially hate it when MS Word changes the first letter of a line to a capital, whether you want it or not. (The fires of hell are waiting for you, Gates!!!)

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree with the thoughts in the poem. Life is very short. We need to enjoy every moment. Thank you for sharing the positive poem.
Coyote

[shallimarRose]

Thank you coyote.. huggs, Rose

[jacob erin-cilberto]

my thoughts...yes, savor every moment of every day..it goes too fast and we don't want to have regrets...that we didn't take time to smell the roses..

[shallimarRose]

thank you Jacob... for stopping to read and review...

[papermush08]

Best words I've read for today. Powerful implications that could give me a drive in life. Thank you for this poem! :)

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Shay.. I appreciate your stopping by to read and your review. Also for the friend request. I have accepted. shallimarRose... Oh can I call you shay? PaperMu-sh-ay?

[Sami Khalil]

"Times too short to play around,

It sneaks up on you, not a sound

If music's playing dance the dance,

Don't sit out and lose your chance

Don't forget to be forgiving,

Life is short but still worth living"
Wow. So much wisdom and experiences in these wonderful lines and the whole. Most people overlook all these facts and then it is too late to enjoy life...A splendid and positive message...:)

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Sami for stopping by to read. Rose

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...You are welcome...:)