Was It You?

…....velvet shadows

once danced on lavender skies

when the glow of a hundred fireflies

quietly lit your face

the Tuscan sun lingered a bit too long

in the silence of your smile

senses filled with heather blues

that seemed to match your eyes

we were younger then

weren't we?

a midnight Sonata

played one last waltz

choreographed by stars

that fell from grace

memories......

written in the sand

washed away long ago

drawing their own conclusions

and I wonder.....

        ........was it really you?

bj smith

aka shallimarRose

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Reviews

[Karen]

This is a great poem with such beautiful images that brings to mind twilight sunsets and sweet, young romance. The last stanza is especially nostalgic, the wondering of whether the memories we harbor of young love, in fact, every happened, or whether the person we are still with was in fact that person of long ago. Either way, it's a beautiful poem!

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Karen for reading. I am glad you enjoyed.. xo

[Einstein Noodle]

mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm one who has come to grips with a love that included the passions of youth ..forgiven and free of guilt and shame one can appreciate past loves and lovers .. as persons and experiences that took us to where we are now .. lovely poem .. precious colors and tenor ..fine read for me
E.

[JayJayBlue]

Excellent work, I love the contrasts of emotions in this piece, there's an undercurrent of sorrow and longing

Keep it up :)

[shallimarRose]

Thanks JJ... huggs!!

[Emerald Seas]

I love this, especially the first two stanzas, contrasting yet they flow together. The second conjured up a set of eyes from memory :)
Wonderful writing, Rose!

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Que'se I appreciate your coming to read. xo

[Stella Armour]

i felt really peaceful in the images you created Rose, "the Tuscan sun lingered a bit too long

in the silence of your smile", i found this very beautiful... many gorgeous moments have a sad ending but memories remain..

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Stella for taking the time.. xo shallimar (Rose)

[Charisma Moonfairy]

This is absolutely lovely

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Charisma for coming to read and review. shallimarRose

[ron]

You do write from your heart Rose. This was very beautful and sad. I enjoyed it very much.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you so much Ron. Yes I do write from my heart which I often wear on my sleeve. Glad you liked this one.. xo

[ron]

I have been acused of wearing mine on my sleeve from time to time..xo

[shallimarRose]

I think poets tend to do that even when they try to hide it. Thank you again Ron. xo

[Simon Welsh]

I love the feel. That first stanza is something special.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Elliott..

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

A dream-like, beautiful, and yet sad poem. I truly enjoy your work.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Sharon. xo

[Keith]

That last line packs a punch. Were all those beautiful memories distorted, were they influenced by what we wanted to believe or feel? Beautifully written Rose.

[shallimarRose]

That poem just kind of came out. Even I am still trying to figure out for sure why that last line is there lol. Thank you for reading Scribbles.. xo