Silhouette in Shackles

Possessiveness, bondage, shadows, self esteem, freedom, shallimarRose, poetry

She is but a shadow,

She makes no move alone;

A silhouette in shackles,

she dare not leave her home...

 

If I could see beyond her smile

what would her sad eyes tell?

I watch her drift from room to room,

I know those rooms too well....

 

Suddenly she's looking back,

she sees me pass her by.

I know if she could budge the door,

that silhouette would fly....

 

She is but a silhouette,

he's the keeper of the key.

That silhouette in shackles,

in the mirror......only me....

© 2000 bj Smith 

aka shallimarRose 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Author's Note

feel free to comment/critique. ty for reading

Reviews

[shallimarRose]

Thank you ShallimarRose and good friend for sharing this piece with us... even if it's 13 years ago, it's still as powerful as it is. I feel you carry such a strong bond with this person, and maybe it's family. You help this person through thick and thin, and be as strong as a rock in the sea for this person. It's a lovely heart you have, I felt that. I hope things, are better now... very beautifully crafted. hugs Eli.

- Elisa

[shallimarRose]

Thank you very much my sweet friend.. Glad you enjoyed.. xo Rose

You're ever so welcome dear... I love your quill, and come by for more! xoxo Eli

[shallimarRose]

thank you there is plenty here just browse titles.. huggs

I will.... :D can't wait till tomorrow, (just having vacation now for three weeks) I will be a lot on the road, but where there is Wifi, I'm on... ;) and will catch up for more! xxx HUGS! :D can't wait!

[B-poet]

It's a condition no one truly likes. Yet there's always some type of bondage in our lives. It's like a gravitational force we can't control. Yet if we learn to live with it & become stronger in the process. Then any form of bondage can be broken once & for all. Great work Rose. A compelling read. I'm adding this to my library. :)

[shallimarRose]

Thank you brian.. xo

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

Very vivid images, aptly expressed. A poignant write of being trapped, whatever the circumstance...

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Sharon for taking the time to read. xo

[Pete Langley]

Palpably sad....it sounds like self-restriction to me and I can relate to it in some ways. Gentle, unforced verse. P.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Pete. I appreciate your reading and taking time to comment. xo

[Rosaria_V]

Wow!! This honestly took my breath away. I love how you can feel this was a personal battle. She is sad and holding herself back and can't seem to find the strength to take the weight "Shackles" that holds her back off. I hope I have it right haha but truly a brilliant write :) well done!

[shallimarRose]

Thanks Rosa Im so glad you felt this. xo shallimar

[Rosaria_V]

I truly did :) Your very welcome!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so plath-like...to be a prisoner in our own life...

intensely sad...the way you write...we the readers really feel it...you give us palpability in your poetry...it doesn't just tell...

[shallimarRose]

Thank you for the nice review Jacob. Happy to see you here.. huggs!!!

[Emerald Seas]

I could feel the intensity. It is a sorrowful and debilitating feeling that resonates from these lines. I can't imagine feeling so constrained with fear. You wrote of it well, grasping this reader into the situation.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Que'se... It was not about myself but a very real situation of a possessive relationship I was witnessing at the time. Glad you enjoyed. shallimar

[Relic]

Excellent, you're blowing me away with these poems. Another for my favorites.

[shallimarRose]

I always feel honored to see you read and review my work. Thank you Relic. xoxo

[Relic]

It was my pleasure.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Woah that was quite intense... I love a woman of mystery.

Also it feel a lot how I have the last few days working that overnight job, trapped with myself in a place darker than the night.

[shallimarRose]

Well not quite the point but i am happy if someone can relate to this in any way. Thank you for reading Cowboy. xo

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are welcome.... I like when people see more in my work than I intended. xo

[shallimarRose]

Me too.... xo

[ba_mcfarlane]

The pain hidden from others, sometimes ourselves, is the ultimate lonely pain...unshared, not understood. I felt waves of sadness washing over me as I read this. It is a painful work; a righteous work.

[shallimarRose]

Its a lonely pain for sure Brian. I experience a similar loneliness from hiding my pain now though this was written years ago for a friend. Thank you for reading scribbles.. huggs!

[Rita L. Sev]

So many are bound - by circumstance, partners, physical or psychological confines... some find the courage to flee; others never do. Having known people who have endured possessive relationships, this calls to mind how they have had to live. You have illustrated the feeling of these chains well.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Rita I am glad you enjoyed. xo