Rain Rhapsody aka (Rhapsody of the Rain)

Rain Rhapsody aka (Rhapsody of the Rain)

A Poem by shallimarRose

 

 

I sit here in sweet silence

but for the tapping on the pane

listening to the melody,

rhapsody of the rain....

 

Gentle glistening petals

hold up their head to quench

the smell of air made pure again,

cleansed of the city stench....

 

Reflected in each rain drop,

I see a tiny glimmer

The streetlight standing at the curb,

brings out that certain shimmer....

 

I'm rocking oh so gently,

don’t want to miss a beat

as each and every droplet

the tempo does repeat....

 

The sound is ever calming,

and soothing to the soul

I stare there at the windowpane

and watch each droplet roll....

 

I sit here in sweet silence

but for the tapping of the rain,

listening to the melody,

rhapsody of the rain....

 

The wind now joins the chorus

and howls soft and low

and adds a wave of ripples,

there on the sidewalks glow....

 

the branches of the willow 

how poetically they sway, 

in harmony they seem to dance

with the oak tree down the way…

 

The tempo picks up speed now

 as I see the darkness flash

I hear the roar of thunder,

with a giant drum-like crash....

 

I sit here in sweet silence,

And from each word refrain.

Listening to the melody,

Rhapsody of the rain….


© 2005 bj Smith

aka shallimarRose

 

 

 

 

 

For more shallimarRose Poetry titles visit my table of contents in my blog...

 

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© 2013 shallimarRose


Author's Note

shallimarRose
comments and critique are welcome. Thank you for reading.

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You seem to have indicated this was a work-in-progress...so here I go again (I'm smiling as I write this, btw)...the tone is wonderful, the images clear and resonant. The meter, however, jumps around a little.

Based on what I'm hearing when I read this aloud, can I infer you're striving for a count of 7 beats in the first line of each stanza, 6 in the second, 8 in the third and, finally, 6 in the fourth? The stanzas that hold to that, sound fine to my ear...the second, fifth and last stanzas for example.

I can provide suggestions if you'd like...email might be a better venue for that. I'll leave that up to you. For a WIP, this is pretty good anyway...bobc

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

uneven tempo was intended... 6 7 8 syllable count bounce around throughout this one Feel free to mes.. read more
bobc

11 Years Ago

Message sent. Everyone feels differently, I guess. I treat all all of my poems as works-in-progress... read more
shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

ty.. i know most do that.. i rarely edit.. This year is the first time i am revisiting to edit for a.. read more



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This is lovely. You are an artist with words painting a gorgeous picture of falling rain, the willow tree poetically swaying..

I could hear the melody.
Wonderful writing.

:) Julie

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you Julie. So glad you enjoyed.. xo rose
Editing this?
Hey just watch what ya doing then, this one of my favourites. It floats thru my brain every time it rains her. If I could write like this I would consider my poetic life fulfilled. But want to edit it?

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

No sweetie this one is one of my master pieces. I will not change it.. Thank you for your kind words.. read more
Keith

11 Years Ago

Phew...............
shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

LOL... Can't change the rain .. xo
You seem to have indicated this was a work-in-progress...so here I go again (I'm smiling as I write this, btw)...the tone is wonderful, the images clear and resonant. The meter, however, jumps around a little.

Based on what I'm hearing when I read this aloud, can I infer you're striving for a count of 7 beats in the first line of each stanza, 6 in the second, 8 in the third and, finally, 6 in the fourth? The stanzas that hold to that, sound fine to my ear...the second, fifth and last stanzas for example.

I can provide suggestions if you'd like...email might be a better venue for that. I'll leave that up to you. For a WIP, this is pretty good anyway...bobc

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

uneven tempo was intended... 6 7 8 syllable count bounce around throughout this one Feel free to mes.. read more
bobc

11 Years Ago

Message sent. Everyone feels differently, I guess. I treat all all of my poems as works-in-progress... read more
shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

ty.. i know most do that.. i rarely edit.. This year is the first time i am revisiting to edit for a.. read more
how I love rain after reading this, you have brought out the imagery quite well, the smell of dust after rain..this is good my friend SHALLIMAR.. I wish there was a pic of rain falling,it would have completed the whole picture either way it is good really good. now shelved in my library

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

well just the small picture in the opening. Some actually do not like pictures or music in the poet.. read more
Really sweet with a beautiful rhythm and flow. Such variety in your wonderful poetry

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

I have a fan club Keith? Are you the only member? lol
Where I live in the desert we are getti.. read more
Keith

11 Years Ago

Just me for now, but its gathering momentum. I see David L P actually paid you a rare visit, so .. read more
shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

David is a friend of mine... I love his knack for making rhyme...

hey thats a poem? lol.. read more
What a pour of rain.. I loved it with full of feelings and in-depth narration here Rose.
Great work done :)
Enjoyed it and really well work and properly executed :)
- Singh :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Vikrantsingh

11 Years Ago

Indeed this one is really amazing ;)
shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

ty again sweetheart. So glad you enjoyed.. xo
Vikrantsingh

11 Years Ago

Hehehehehe ;) you're welcome :D
One of the most beautiful renditions on Rain that I have come across...
A truly noteworthy poem, please accept my compliments.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

thank you so much..
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ron
That was one of the most beautiful peices about rian and a thunder storm I hav read. It made me feel like I was there.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

High praise indeed. Thank you Ron. xo
ron

11 Years Ago

You arem ost welcome Rose xo
The gentle cadence is amazing, like gentle rain itself. This is a lovely piece. Like all great poetry, it soon had me back remembering quiet times reading, to the soothing rhythm of the rain outside my window.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you Brian. I love the rain. We dont get much of it here in the desert though.. xo

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