Muse For Rent

play it again Sam..

Yesterday  Sam posted a poem called Where Did My Muse Go? in which he was putting lost and found flyers out.  I was inspired to write this poem placing my own flyer and add..... 

Memories keep me awake

   Uncontrolled voices silently loud

      Sounding in the night , words

         Exiled more than once

            Forbidden secrets

               Obstinate thoughts

                  Resounding measures of time not left

                     Resting in the frontal cortex

                        Estranged from reality

                          Nocturnal nightingales

                              Testing my sanity nightly

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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bj smith

aka shallimarRose

Author's Note

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Reviews

[ShelleyA]

Hi Rose. A good write about the fickle muse. A skillfully crafted Acrostic. Good presentation. Good imagery, flow and tone. Good depth of feeling. I like the power of the piece. I like this line:
"uncontrolled voices silently loud" - vivid. Good word choice. Well penned and a good read. Write on!

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Shelly glad you enjoyed.. I was not sure if I could make it work at first.. xo

[Einstein Noodle]

great one my friend! i hope you return soon and let me know you are here :/
smart acrostic poem .. i so relate to the brain that whispers just before sleep ..we simply can not keep hidden rooms ..no matter how hard we try ..it will present itself to our mind's eye relentlessly until faced squarely ...so glad i found this one and read ..so glad you shared it shallimar ..
E.

[SteveB]

Nicely done. I think we have al had those sleepless nights when a line or few lines flots around in our head demanding to be heard. "Nocturnal nightingales" indeed.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Steve for reading and taking the time to leave me a note.. shallimar

[SteveB]

My pleasure indeed

[Ayvid N]

The elusive muse tests our sanity so...
sometimes just won't be there...
And sometimes won't let us alone in peace...with those silent voices and obsessive thoughts!

I identified with this write so much!

[shallimarRose]

Thank you. Yes sometimes we just want the muse to sleep so we can lol.... shallimar

[Simon Welsh]

Oh, I love it. Structure is perfect and well executed.

[shallimarRose]

Thanks Elliot.. xo

[Stella Armour]

love the acrostic.. you have a great muse for rent..lol

think i might rent yours and make mine redundant....

[shallimarRose]

LOL Stella.. cute..Ty for reading. Rose

[Keith]

Yep, he's nowhere to be found when you need him, then won't leave you alone when you wanna do something else, like sleep.

[shallimarRose]

like at 3:00 am , ha.... thanks Keith. xo

[Karen]

This is great and creative. So often we see the Muse as a beautiful Grecian nymph frolicking in the field with her sister Muses, and coming upon a passerby in happenstance and gracing him with inspiration (or at least that's how I see it). This "ad" seems more realistic, and more human! Excellent writing!

[shallimarRose]

Thanks Karen. xo

[Cody Williams]

I like the poem very much! Thanks for sharing it!

_CW

[shallimarRose]

Thank you for stopping to read Cody.

[Cody Williams]

No problem at all!

[ba_mcfarlane]

What a unique concept, and executed with the aplomb of a gifted mistress of poetic perfection. Bravo!

[shallimarRose]

LOL thank you Scribbles.. **winks** Rose

[ba_mcfarlane]

HAHAHAHAHAHAHA

[Rita L. Sev]

Cleverly done! Some days the Muse abandons us; other days she just won't shut up! :)

[shallimarRose]

Yes.. like at 3:00 am lol thanks Rita..