The Courtship of a Candle

The Courtship of a Candle

A Poem by shallimarRose

In the courtship of a candle

there's a dance within the flame,

there's the light of sweet seduction,

there's the glimmer of restrain...

 

In the courtship of a candle

there's a warm embracing glow.

there's a yes inside the flicker,

in the shadows there's a no...

 

In the courtship of the candle

there's two flames that can't entwine.

there's the promise of fine burgundy

the taste of bitter wine.

 

In the courtship of a candle,

there's a glow of amber-green.

there's a hope of things foreshadowed,

there's a fear of things unseen...

 

In the courtship of a candle

there's an every glowing hue.

It's the thought of things that might have been,


and a love we never knew...

 

© bj Smith 
aka shallimarRose
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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shallimarRose
This poem is very old... Thank you for reading..

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What an incredible analogy between a candle and a couple. I never saw the connection between the two the way it is described here. I have seen the connection between a flame, a fire, a bonfire, etc., but not a candle as you describe it in this poem. It's so detailed, and the analogy is wonderful! The most incredible part of is that the rhyme is perfect, not too simplistic but not too forced either. Excellent poem! Thank you for writing and sharing it with us!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you Karen for a most nice review.. Rose



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Wow!!!!!!!! this is amazing. I loved the imagery

Posted 11 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you Cassie.. xo shallimar
The metaphors are seamless sweet and erotic. I love your muse, you are a true talent?

Posted 11 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you Brian.. xo Rose
I can see the seductive shadows dancing upon the wall and two goblets of burgundy wine
waiting to be sipped...lovely imagery Rose.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you Rose.. I appreciate that it was so visual for you. xo Rose
What an incredible analogy between a candle and a couple. I never saw the connection between the two the way it is described here. I have seen the connection between a flame, a fire, a bonfire, etc., but not a candle as you describe it in this poem. It's so detailed, and the analogy is wonderful! The most incredible part of is that the rhyme is perfect, not too simplistic but not too forced either. Excellent poem! Thank you for writing and sharing it with us!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you Karen for a most nice review.. Rose
Wow this is amazing, Courtship described wonderfully and I loved the poem as well.
In this poem you share courtship using candle which burns and shares it light.. Amazing peened Rose :)
Stay Blessed :)
- Singh :)


Posted 11 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you Vik... (singh) I am glad you enjoyed the comparison.. Rose
flirting with fire are we? Nice poem, not sure I like the number times that one line is repeated but I do like the imagery of playing with fire and the allusion to love.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you for reading Mark.. This is not my usual style but in this particular poem it's form depend.. read more
Outstanding...read with the up beat or the more romantic slow refrain...either way works purrrrr...fectly.
I love the way you build to the climax...the last line...I tend to do the same to leave the reader wither an "aha" or a "wow" or a "hmmmm" or an "aw"...this to me was the wow factor...it all makes sense once I know you never knew...
It was a crisp write...an energetic yet ethereal write...a glowing, colorful write. Your imagery was spot on...your rhyme scheme and pace the reader choses, allows the poem to be read in either a melancholy, reminiscent tone or an upbeat, "it was fun" time of your life" hue....Depends on how you want to look at life (half full/half empty) that is until "a love we never knew" defines and summarizes what the candle truly symbolizes.
I loved it Shallimer
Just so freaking good...
You're beyond talented
allen


Posted 11 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

You humble me Allen... and yes, many of my poems have that wth or hmmm moment at the end.. I love su.. read more
Great flow to this one, it has a tempo all it's own like the flickering of a candle, a hypnotizing read shallimar. I love candles, light them every night...love this too!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Is that it? lol...my son says I'm a pyromaniac and he's a firefighter! ;-)
My pleasure always... read more
shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

LOL @ pyromaniac... my daughter always moves my candles.. thinks they are too close to this or that... read more
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Dang kids! Lol...
I loved it. Very nicely done. I am often mesmerized by the flickering flame of a candle and now I am mesmerized by your poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you Jack.. If I can mesmerize the master I must be doing something right.. xo
This is an amazing piece of writing... within the heart of the flame burns the glow of humanity.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you Cowboy.. I am glad you enjoyed.. xo
The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)

11 Years Ago

The pleasure was all mine :)

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I am a singer, writer, poet, dreamer, believer..... I am an unconventional poet who has been writing rhyme since the age of five. I enjoy all styles of poetry. I write by ear not syllable count .. more..

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