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in pre-sunrise moments -- love these lines...so clever!
This was a very observational write with a lot of clever and witty wordplay. You use language well, and I appreciate that so deeply! This has texture, style, even scents and tastes. Also, the flow was quite nice, which I always appreciate as well. Nicely penned.
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11 Years Ago
Thank you Sarah.. I always appreciate hearing from you.. xo Rose
"hung like a ballad
on a slow long note"
those lines move me especially ..lots to enjoy in reading this one ..classical anything gets swept away but does return as it has roots and discipline .. but is so analytical ;)
E.
I understand the poem. I went from active person to observer in the bars. Funny how things move around you. I like to talk to people in lonely bars. We learn good stories and wisdom from people swimming in regret. I like the thoughts and places you took me in the poem. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote
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11 Years Ago
Thank you Coyote.. I am glad you read and related to this one.. xo rose
conjoined by tequila
in pre-sunrise moments -- love these lines...so clever!
This was a very observational write with a lot of clever and witty wordplay. You use language well, and I appreciate that so deeply! This has texture, style, even scents and tastes. Also, the flow was quite nice, which I always appreciate as well. Nicely penned.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thank you Sarah.. I always appreciate hearing from you.. xo Rose
You know, I just absolutely love how you mold and maneuver words so beautifully. This had to be a huge effort. At least let me think that, Ok?! This is going in my 'favorites'!
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11 Years Ago
New favorite huh? Awww, thank you Sharon for coming to read and the kind words.. xo shallimarRose
Very well done. I like it. A bar full of people and trying not to notice what they do or who they are.
Sounds like a few of my visit to a bar.
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11 Years Ago
Thank you Ron.. Actually she is not only noticing but taking notes...while trying not to analyze too.. read moreThank you Ron.. Actually she is not only noticing but taking notes...while trying not to analyze too much the secret rendezvous... Im glad you liked it.. xo Rose
Sometimes a poet's inspiration is beauty and sometimes it comes from the south end of a long ago memory, dusty in the dark and louder than liked. Writing under a neon light that seems to smile when we don't. Very nice Rose. This feels very sad to me. eyes peering through the smoke, remembring days...oh those days.
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You hit the nail right on the head Jack.. It is meant to feel sad and melancholy.. Perhaps as she jo.. read moreYou hit the nail right on the head Jack.. It is meant to feel sad and melancholy.. Perhaps as she jots down notes on that tear stained page she is a forgotten poet that was driven to drink by something or someone.. I glass of regret can taste quite bitter. I know first hand..
So glad you felt this one.. xo Rose
I am a singer, writer, poet, dreamer, believer.....
I am an unconventional poet who has been writing rhyme since the age of five. I enjoy all styles of poetry. I write by ear not syllable count .. more..