Pirates Muse

Something I wrote just for fun.. Enjoy...

Pirates Muse

 

Through darkened clouds of rain and thunder

There came a clamor from that 'twas under

Beneath the raging sea so dark

A tale I thought dare not embark

 

Thunder stormed and the ocean raged

Clouds had rolled upon the page

Darkness fell and dankess filled

In every corner, mindless shrills

 

Ships were tossed and thrown about

Than I screamed, Please let me out

I can not catch them, I can not reach

For sure they'll wash up on the beach

 

I felt the lungs within me log

I watched the rolling in of  fog

I saw the waves grow ever stronger

I could not hold on any longer

 

Down and under I fell within

The witchy waves of pirates grin

While all the crow’s-nest watchers yell

For sure this is the depths of hell

 

I own the darkest coldest feeling

Than I reach to touch the ceiling

I'm reaching for a dixie cup

This is a dream , Please wake me up

 

The ships continue round and round

I look for me but I can't be found

Where am I, I need to know

I grab an oar and start to row

 

But rowing seems a bit remote

You see I did not have a boat

I only have these hands and fingers

I hear the voice of pirate singers

 

They're clamorings, meaningless words

I can't understand, they sound absurd

I try to drain the water out

But there is no drain, there was no spout

 

Then I awoke, It was a dream

I should not have watched the show I seen

I muse the thought of oceans door

I don't like pirates anymore

 

lol

©  bj Smith 

aka shallimarRose

 

 

 

Author's Note

Feel free to comment/critique... shallimarRose

Reviews

[endo rush]

...but they were not the pirates, you were. It's just that you dreamed you were them.And when you woke, a pirate you were, once again. And the sea pulled you into its loneliness, where you dreamed and dreamed some more.And when shore at last appeared, you were a pirate oh no, no more. Until of course you dreamed some more.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you for your take on this poem.. This was NOT a real dream.. It is 100% my creative imagination and what I call a rhyme driven poem... Where I start the poem and just tpe letting the rhyme go wherever it wants to take me.. I really appreciate your reading and comments always ...xo

[ba_mcfarlane]

Who says that a highly skilled write cannot be a mirthful fun read....What a wonderful work, kudos!

[shallimarRose]

Thank you was it Mike?? I appreciate your reading and kind comment.. shallimarRose

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

It only takes one bad experience to make us dislike something associated with that experience... you took a fun tongue in cheek approach at expressing it.

[shallimarRose]

Thanks cowboy.. your presence on my page always welcome.. xo Rose

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

Wonderful imagery, flow, and rhythm
I love your poems, anytime!

This brought back memories of a pirate show I saw a few years ago at Treasure Island on the Las Vegas Strip.

[shallimarRose]

I actually do like Pirate's especially when they look like Johnny Depp... just sayin'.. lol Thanks for reading Sharon.. xo shallimarRose

[Leo Elderkin]

Very nice! I love the cadence. High marks on vocabulary, and the imagery is to die for (pun intended :) )
Great poem, Barbara.

[shallimarRose]

Thanks Leo... I was hoping you would pop in and read this one today.. huggs, Barbara

[Angi]

It is good to read (and write) lighthearted, fun poems once in awhile. This was a delight! Angi~

[shallimarRose]

Thanks Angi.. Yes, I have a lot of fun with my rhyme sometimes... xo

[RainDancer1997]

I love pirates lol and I had Johnny Depp in my mind through out this poem haha... My favorite so far:)

[shallimarRose]

Ha... Yes i wrote this not long after I saw the first Pirates of the Caribbean movie.. I love Johnny Depp too in everything but Willy Wonka and the Chocolate factory... hated the remake.. Thank you for reading.. xo shallimarRose

[ShelleyA]

A good write about a bad dream of the pirate life. Good imagery, flow rhyme abs tone. An entertaining story poem and fun read. Write on!

[shallimarRose]

Glad yu enjoyed.. xo shallimarRose

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think you meant "I grab an oar and start to row"?

i like this...i saw Pirates of the Caribbean" and maybe "ocean's door"

i saw ghost words like ghost pirates driving ships of writing...and you trying to find yourself within---

wanting to wake from the dream...where are my words? i can't catch up to them, and they haunt me like a bad dream.

jacob

[shallimarRose]

Thanks Jacob.. Yes, sometimes my typing cant catch up to my thoughts and make little errors.. I am glad you enjoyed this one... You really understood it well... Rose

[Trevor Jay Bloodworth]

Fun and entertaining. I loved every minute of it. Good work Shallimar.

[shallimarRose]

Thanks Trev.. I am sopleased you enjoyed.. I really shouldn't watch tv late at night anymore maybe.. lol shallimarRose

[Rita L. Sev]

Ha! Clever and fun piece here. Good rhythm,; a very engaging read! :)

[shallimarRose]

Thank you again Rita.. xo shallimarRose