Pirates Muse

Something I wrote just for fun.. Enjoy...

Pirates Muse

 

Through darkened clouds of rain and thunder

There came a clamor from that 'twas under

Beneath the raging sea so dark

A tale I thought dare not embark

 

Thunder stormed and the ocean raged

Clouds had rolled upon the page

Darkness fell and dankess filled

In every corner, mindless shrills

 

Ships were tossed and thrown about

Than I screamed, Please let me out

I can not catch them, I can not reach

For sure they'll wash up on the beach

 

I felt the lungs within me log

I watched the rolling in of  fog

I saw the waves grow ever stronger

I could not hold on any longer

 

Down and under I fell within

The witchy waves of pirates grin

While all the crow’s-nest watchers yell

For sure this is the depths of hell

 

I own the darkest coldest feeling

Than I reach to touch the ceiling

I'm reaching for a dixie cup

This is a dream , Please wake me up

 

The ships continue round and round

I look for me but I can't be found

Where am I, I need to know

I grab an oar and start to row

 

But rowing seems a bit remote

You see I did not have a boat

I only have these hands and fingers

I hear the voice of pirate singers

 

They're clamorings, meaningless words

I can't understand, they sound absurd

I try to drain the water out

But there is no drain, there was no spout

 

Then I awoke, It was a dream

I should not have watched the show I seen

I muse the thought of oceans door

I don't like pirates anymore

 

lol

©  bj Smith 

aka shallimarRose

 

 

 

Author's Note

Feel free to comment/critique... shallimarRose

Reviews

[endo rush]

...but they were not the pirates, you were. It's just that you dreamed you were them.And when you woke, a pirate you were, once again. And the sea pulled you into its loneliness, where you dreamed and dreamed some more.And when shore at last appeared, you were a pirate oh no, no more. Until of course you dreamed some more.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you for your take on this poem.. This was NOT a real dream.. It is 100% my creative imagination and what I call a rhyme driven poem... Where I start the poem and just tpe letting the rhyme go wherever it wants to take me.. I really appreciate your reading and comments always ...xo

[Clara]

A very cleverly written and humourous poem.
I laughed at the end. :D

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Lola for comeing to read.. I am glad it made you smile.. shallimarRose

[OBWhiteHawk]

I loved this, have always liked pirates and learning about them. The ending was unexpected a gave me a big laugh. :)

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Whitehawk... I am glad you enjoyed it.. shallimarRose

[Keith]

Wonderful fun poem, I loved it. You captured the chaos and confusion of a bad dream, and the last line... How often are we turned off something because of what we dreamed?

[shallimarRose]

yes .. kid of like when you eat something and get really ill and never want it again? Ha... thanks for reading Keith.. xo shallimarRose

[AnnaLeQuinn]

Oh my word. This was fabulous and absolutely stunning. You wrote this perfectly! I loved it!! So entertaining And keeps you n the edge of your seat!! I imagined it and it was quite a rush and journey! Great writing. Thank you Miss Rose :-)

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Anna.... I am glad it kept your attention throughout.. xo Rose

[AnnaLeQuinn]

Of course! Xx

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This is sea imagery at its finest, my friend. I love the feeling of the ocean (I look at it every day), and though I tend to get sick on boat rides, I could still feel the beauty in this :) I also like that you brought this back and forth from dream to reality...because this happens to me quite often; I will be in a dream, know it is a dream, and yet I can't seem to wake up. Wierd disjointed feeling... Nicely penned!

[Coyote Poetry]

I spend a lot of time in the sea. The ocean can be cold and powerful. I enjoyed your tale. I did like the ending. A sailor had to be brave and strong. Good movies can make us have scary thoughts and dreams. Thank you for sharing the entertaining poem.
Coyote

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Coyote... I m glad you enjoyed... I like free verse but write a lot of rhyme driven pieces.. This one just took off on a journey of its own lol.. Rose

[B-poet]

A profound theme & a uniquely written poem. Great work. An enjoyable read.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you so much poet... I am pleased you found time to visit and read. Glad you enjoyed. shallimarRose

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha matey. arrrrrrrrrrgh! and a pirates patchy wink. i love pirates; and bones they click; and clatter within me and are a tatatatatat upon me skin.
dreams of water are important. you should look up a meaning as close as one can.
E.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Mr. Noodle.. **winks**.. I am glad you enjoyed... shallimarRose

[Pete Langley]

I do enjoy the theme of this, Rose....it takes me back to nights listening to an old mate of mine singing sea shanties with an old squeezebox....this had the same feel, even though it was your dream. I felt you lost the cadence slightly once or twice, which I think you might look at, but otherwise I thoroughly enjoyed. P.

[shallimarRose]

Hmmm... did you read it out loud Pete? When I read it aloud it seems flawless to me and does not miss a note... My rhyme is usually spot on so please tell me where you feel this? Keep in mind this is a fun piece and is about a dream so not suppose to make a whole lot of sense. Rhyme wise I see nothing...Thank You Pete for honest critique... Both your photo and name seem very familiar.. Have we met on another site? Facebook perhaps? xo shallimarRose

[Pete Langley]

Haha yes I read it and sang it! There`s nowt much wrong at all, love...3rd stanza, line 3, perhaps "I can not catch them, can not reach" and 7th stanza, line 2 perhaps " I look for me but can`t be found" As for me....well, I`ve used my pen-name for 50 years, but I`ve not been published since `87 as far as I know, when my only collection was published. I`m only on WC, so if you`ve seen my name anywhere else, I must have a doppleganger!