Epiphony

Epiphony

A Poem by shallimarRose
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just a poem...

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Epiphony



it came to me in an epiphany

when I thought my mind was clear

laying in the sand on a beachy day

listening to the echoe of the wind

absorbing the scents of salten air



It came to me in a dream

when I thought I would sleep through

when yesterday was not an option

today was calmly swollen

tomorrow no more than a doubtful expectation

of something ill-concieved



it came to me in a revelation

like that word on the tip of my tounge

the one I should have known

recognized

sudden awareness

budding the souring tastes

of realization



it came to me in an epiphany

a moment of astute comprehension

suddenly it came to me

and I saw your truths

as nothing more than waxed  mannequins

dressed in tissue paper dresses

and cellophane promises



it came to me in a dream

and when I opened my eyes

you were gone



© bj smith

aka shallimarRose



© 2013 shallimarRose


Author's Note

shallimarRose
comments and critique always welcome..thats how we grow..

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Too often we realize the importance of people in our lives when they are gone. Of course, sometimes when they are gone, we realize their promises were cellophane and their truths were not quite what we once were sure they were. Ephiphanies come at the strangest moments, but once we have one, things are so clear. Rose, I liked this a lot. I can relate. Lydi**

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you Lydi... xo



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Amazing how the mind works and we find revelations in the strangest of moments or inspired by the likeliest of things. Beautifully written.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you Cowboy.. I am glad you enjoyed.. Have a wonderful night .. xo Rose
The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)

11 Years Ago

My pleasure dear Rose... you too xo
"today was calmly swollen"
my cup of tea! love the contrasts. surely causes me to pause and think. love it!
details so small...do you mean echo or echoes? :))
you surprised me with the turn. something i most always enjoy. my preconceived notions challenged and trampled. thank you :) when the mannequins came out my instant thought went to voodoo dolls.. i get a ton out of this one..peace on earth sister!
E.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you E.. by the mannequins dressed in waxed paper dressed and cellophane dresses I was going fo.. read more
Einstein Noodle

11 Years Ago

yes. your meaning is loud and clear; and fits. its my flitting mind, New Orleans; and a woman wronge.. read more
shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

thank you again.. You are too kind.. Happy to know you. Rose
Hauntingly graceful and emotive... resonates.
Hugs

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you Sharonlee.. huggs
Each stanza is its own mini story that projects detailed imagery in the reader's mind. As always I enjoy your writings. J'adore! -Ian

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

thanks Ian.. I like the new name a lot.. xo shallimarRose
Splendid read and write, Ms. Shallimar

Posted 11 Years Ago


shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much Brandon.. I am glad you took time out to read.. xo shallimarRose
I studied dreams in psychology last year. No one knows exactly what they mean. And that's why there so special:) Great job:)!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thanks again Rainy... In this dream the epiphany's came in a dream causing the eyes to be open.. The.. read more
Isn't it amazing the things that come to us in our dreams, and then dissapate when we open our eyes? I'm always fascinated by the things that I remember about my dreams, so briefly. This was very conceptual, and I enjoyed that. I like the imagery and the flow was nice as well .

Suggestion:

2nd line of the 2nd stanza, should it be "one I thought I would sleep through" ?

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

11 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and for the suggestion.. No , the When is correct.. It should actually have a.. read more
Girl Friday (Sarah W.)

11 Years Ago

I see it now...I read it with a comma and it worked...

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shallimarRose

F W, WA



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I am a singer, writer, poet, dreamer, believer..... I am an unconventional poet who has been writing rhyme since the age of five. I enjoy all styles of poetry. I write by ear not syllable count .. more..

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