Sun

Bright and sunny, not a cloud in the sky

A day at the beach to watch the time go by

I'm wondering

Watching as the mud crabs burrow in the sand

Listening to the waves as they crush into the land

Feeling the Sun's rays warm me up as I sit in my chair

Tasting the salt in the salty ocean air

 

The sun is smiling, shining on me

A good book is resting on my left knee

A light breeze brushes my cheek

A pair of sandals dangles off my feet

Next to me, a picnic with a pile of food

An umbrella stands where it was put

 

But I'm wondering, lost in thought

Something is missing, something i desperately sought

I'm alone, not a soul in sight

Darkness envelops me as I sit in the light

Reviews

[Gracie G]

You paint such a beautiful, imaginable picture in the beginning. The last stanza came as a shocker, but I really love the message. Just a note: in the line "Listing to the waves as the crush into the land," should it be "Listening to the waves as they crash into the land"? Good poem though, I enjoyed the read!

[Shahrier]

hahaha, you are right, i made a typo with the "listening". this was written at a time when people used to see in me a happy go lucky kid who was happy and all that, but inside i was a total mess and highly depressed. that was the meaning behind the poem. people notice the good in other people's lives, but only the person can truly see the loneliness that resides within.

[Gracie G]

Glad I could help! I'm sorry to hear that, and I know exactly what you mean, I went though the same kind of thing. It's tough, but writing can be such a useful outlet.

[Shahrier]

it has. and after months of writing, i feel much better. or maybe just duller. thanks for reading my poem. ill read some of yours now too. :)

[Gracie G]

Happy to hear that things are better for you. Thanks, hope you like them :)

[imagination-1234]

I love the jem of loneliness in here...one feels comfortable but not comfortable enough...Well that's what I got from this poem. Very beautifully written, very beautifully thought out...Well done!

[Shahrier]

a little while ago in my life, i went though some depressing times and i had good friends to comfort me, but it wasn't the same after a brake up. and although i had this "happy" life and good friends and everyone told me how i was better off without her, i was lonely. and only i knew how lonely i truly was.