Broken Heart

Broken Heart

A Poem by Shae
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This isn't a very well written poem...so ignore anything that's wrong with it!

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My heart is broken in two

All because of you

I thought you were the one

And my search was finally done

I really liked you

And I thought you liked me

But I guess I was blind and I just couldn't see

When you said goodbye,

I was tough and didn't cry

Even though I felt as if I was going to die

You said you still want to be freinds

But I guess this is how the story ends

© 2008 Shae


Author's Note

Shae
Ignore grammer problems...what do you think???

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Go to my other account...cuz i forgot the password to the one this poem is on. [[does that even make any sense at all??? haha]]

Posted 15 Years Ago


this is true lots of people feel that they've been betrayed when someone stops loving them. keep writting.

Posted 16 Years Ago


Yup, it was me (Ashley)! Like I told you before, I think it's a wonderful poem. Keep it up! I'd like to see a few more sometime!

Posted 16 Years Ago


I think many people can relate to your poem, the only want to be friends answer!
I liked it, Shelly

Posted 16 Years Ago


Straight forward and to the point...lovers don't make good friends in the aftermath. Nice rhyme.

Posted 16 Years Ago


I like it. it seemed as if maybe you over thought it. but it is awesome, can't wait to read more
~Amberlee

Posted 16 Years Ago


I thought that was a really good poem! Don't underestimate yourself (trust me, I do it a lot!) You sound a lot like me, actually. I don't have much experience when it comes to boys (hello, I'm 13!), but "friends" do this to me sometimes. Great poem!

Posted 16 Years Ago


Very good. I liked it very much. Keep writing.

Posted 16 Years Ago


I think I like it! Don't you just hate that whole "let's be friend" line. That's never what's meant.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on February 15, 2008

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Hey! I'm not a very good writer so bear with me when you read my writings! According to my family and friends and teachers...I am a very talented writer! Yea...Right! Anywho, my favorite sport is socc.. more..


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