Stranded

I think of

freshly cut

lemons,

and pink jasmin,

when you ask me:

''What do you think

is the scent of dreams?''

 

I think of endless white beaches

with no single flower or tree,

just warm crystal sand

and a sweet-water sea.

 

A silence,

so silent,

that you can

hear her sing...

 

I think of this scene

when you ask me:

''Where would you take me,

if we stranded in a dream?''

 

I think of you.All the time.

And more than i

can handle.

The warm sand

in your hand

as you slowly release it,

and it gets carried by the wind.

 

I smell the jasmin

in my hair,

the lemons,

in my hands.

I hear the song of silence.

I taste the sweetness

of the sea...

 

And for

a little while,

i close my eyes...

I smile...

Because you're also missing me.

 

Reviews

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Highly stylised imagery and unforced emtion encase the reader in the plotted story, well done, good read.

[Richielee]

vivid and fresh poetry

[Eagle Cruagh]

Someone has observed that certain people
can actually smell another over vast distance.
Some have recorded instances of actually
feeling a person with finger tips.
This is all sort of "far out" , but may have some
authenticity.
My point: You probably can taste the sweetness
of the sea, sense the lemons in your hands and
that would be phenomenol, but for the fact that
you are able to paint word pictures of what you
sense. That is remarkable .
Thank you for your words,
------ Eagle Cruagh

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Beautiful imagery..I can almost smell the lemons and jasmin as I read this. Great write!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

At first glance, the reader is answering the question, and as your read down the lines seems almost written in a lyrical tone... with the almost repeating stanza... but you weave in and out of the verse, given this a subtle flow... Thanks for sharing...

[Moflo]

This was nicely written. The rhymes are clever and nicely executed and the imagery, and idea of visiting dreams, is nicely portrayed. Great job!

[Kyle]

I like the color that you seem to like to use.....I enjoy the dreamy pictures and how visual you are in your writing.

I also like the romance in this and the quoted conversation. These things keep my interest.

[Antonio Valentino]

Ohh Ari, your words always take me to places I feel only reside in the eyes of the heart. Right now as I drink tea with fresh ginger, lemon, and mint, it brings the sweet aroma of these words to me, to lay softly on my lips and warm my breath of memory.

Love it, as always.
:) xx