Copper Lips

I'll put up
a statue,
of us...
In the central square
of our city:
''The one we stopped building''....

 

And all
who still
dwell there,
will know now...
Who made them,
cherrished them,
and then never let them be...

 

You will be crafted gold,
and i will be shimmering silver,
and we will hold each other close..
Even the breeze
will have to curve its way
beside us..

Our beauty
that was only in our
''togetherness''
cannot die there....
It can live there....

 

They said to me:
''Love,dear child,
does not come every day...
Sometimes it never finds your path,
sometimes it comes,
but does not stay...''

And i found you
when i had just began to bloom,
to open my petals in the threatening
new Sun....

I found you
in you,
looking for me,
with those
eversearching eyes...

I beheld you
only in a place
where they cannot
touch you...
or take you....
...from me....

I loved you....
...somewhere....
where i am bound
to stay with you...
For more i'd never
dare to ask...

I trusted you
in a world where
there is no Time...
So i will have you now,
and long after i die...

We bathe in immortality,
are untouched by reality...

...In the city of Memory and Vision....
...That we left half completed.....

Where law says
to obey no law,
when it comes to love
so kind....
And it gives you
every blessed wish
to create life
with your mind...

 

So
on an altar
i will place us...
Looking
fearless,
far away...
Over the melting sunset
and the sweet smell
of promised dusk...

The Golden you,
the silver me...
But both with copper lips...
Who of all
will understand
the meaning...of a last kiss?

 

In the end....we were the same...
In the end,we had a reason
to stay...there...and build
what still needs music and light...
In the end...
we should not stray
from each other...
In the cold cities of today...

Reviews

[SM Davis]

Antonio sent me a read request for this.

So i will have you now,
and long after i die...
We bathe in immortality,
are untouched by reality...

There is a feeling of "I love you ... leave me alone...don't leave me" feel to this. The lines above give it an almost stalkish feel. I will have you regardless and so will build this statue.

Very interesting piece.

[The Analog Kid]

VEry beuatiful . FIlled with imagery and symbolism. Nice job!

[Harley Ann]

this. is. amazing.
just...wow. very moving, and symbolic...
obviously, its going in my library. not everyone can find a love worth writing about, if one at all...
"I loved you....
...somewhere...."
this is one of my many favorite lines.
as though love literally carries you off your feet, to a distant land, not very far away at all, perhaps it is only a land as deep as their eyes. and in this land, anything can happen, where its just the two of you, bound in love, two perfect halves...
i love it

[Hanan_Maliah]

I am impressed...this has such beauty entwined with reality sprinkled with the truth of our life...

Do keep writing as you find your way through this life and it will continue to refine you as a woman!

[Scandalous]

Very intense the words just floated right off the page. You managed to produce some erotic, yet some very innocent pictures and where anger met sadness was divine! Keep up the good work!

[Adora.xo]

This was intense. Very very good, great images. I love the copper lips! Keep it up hon!

~Adora

[zombiikillah666]

this is really good!
intense and just super awesome. xD

[Stammers]

And it gives you
every blessed wish
to create life
with your mind...

This got better and better as the piece progressed, there was so much said it was hard to wrap your mind around it all, I liked the free verse rhyming, it sounds beautiful read out loud. A really original concept - loved it.

[Cherrie Palmer]

you have done a marvelous job with this. I liked the way you had the wind wrap around them.

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved the photo. The ancient gifts for us to see are proof man knew beauty in the past. I like your poem. A interesting story. Together forever is a interesting tale. The description and the story was outstanding. Total poem is excellent . I did like the ending lines.. Thank you for the very good poem.
Coyote