Fervent Folly

Look at the creases 

you made in my glove

Each of my poems 

has suffered for love.

Each of my wrinkles

is dipped in your time

Each of my rosemary

needing your thyme

I wake every morning

forgetting a dream

I sleep every evening

remembering a scheme

I savor each thirst

for it leads to your well

Grant me a secret

that I'll never tell

Give me a promise

that lasts through the rapture

Your towering castle

is so hard to capture

I climb over ivy

and I climb over stone

Your gates do not open

and I'm still alone

Look at the cracks

in my beckoning wall

They threaten to crumble

they threaten to fall

Look at the lovers 

all busy eloping

Each of my poems 

has been punished for hoping.

Reviews

[angel]

Never despair over being alone.
The advantages outweigh the bad;
Independence, I say,is a skill you should hone
And, I think, in the end, you'll be glad
Not to have anyone telling you what
They want or they need you to do'
Just be glad there's no other to cater to. But
Also glad you can focus on you.
I truly do wish I could say I had done
Just what I'm recommending to you!
Instead, I got hitched,and it cancelled my fun
Now, I'm constantly told what to do.
Oh, how I long for the freedom I knew,
The pleasures of living so free!
Consolation, I fear, is an iffy thing too--
Cos I need him to die before me.

[Poetic Beauty]

To drink in "someone's well"
Too many lines to pick a favorite. This carries great emotion of love lost and yet hope at the same time all pour onto pages.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

I am so glad that I stumbled upon this magnificent poem. The first stanza is like the first flower on a rain chain, and the rain just spills from one stanza to the next, spilling finally into that last heart-rending line of punishment for hoping. This is so lady-like and beautiful in the most resplendent way. Congratulations on writing such a penultimate poem. I love it.

[emipoemi]

........Oh, if only you could hear me as "wow" gasped out of my mouth! Ho-ly kwap!! I love this poem. Perfection in every aspect of its being!! Strong imagery! Sublime musicality! Great repetitions! And that ending....I'm speechless! Well done!

[wordman]

reminds me of a beautiful fairy tale from long ago

[Antonio Valentino]

Love this as I do all of them!

:)

[The Twin Arenas]

Nice one. It's an old story, but if it's told well, it's one with an audience every time. The fourth stanza could stand a little tightening up, I think. That's good, though. It's good to have a piece worth working on.