The Promise

"There is a line where promises bleed over into regret"

Is it so much to ask
For one moment of your time?
After all that I have given
It seems so trivial after all
One instant to hold your hand
Just a second in your arms
A kiss before you walk out the door
You never miss those things
Until the day they are gone
It seems like only yesterday
We were both smiling
laughing
Holding onto one another
But the cold of winter has set in
And my soul like the streets
Around us begin to freeze over
I need you to touch me
Like the way you used to
Look at me with those eyes
And tell me everything will be OK
I promise that I will smile
When you smile
I promise
That I will try to put into words
All these thoughts
Which are ravaging my mind
I promise
That I won't leave you
Like the way you think I will
I promise you....
I promise...

Author's Note

I wrote this about a failing relationship, where I was torn between doing what I knew was right and the promises I had made.

Reviews

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

The emotions that could be felt were very deep. I really liked this poem. It was really nicely written as well. The emotions are what pulled me in the most. Thanks for sharing.

[deeps]

I like the deep emotion you protrayed here.
Well expressed.

[Detective Watts]

I can't think of a decent critique so I'll just say this, excellent.