Sweet Agony

Heart flutters -- it’s pace increases rapidly

Thadump…...thadump….thadump..thadumpthadumpthadump

Like the moment seeing your biggest fear

Palms sweaty with nervous-calmness

Stomach in knots -- as if you’ve got the flu

A trampling stampede of buffalos

Eyes wide with shock and delight

Like Winnie the Pooh trying honey for the 1st time

Face lit up brighter than

fireflies in a pitch black night

Tempting and craving

Like starving and seeing a buffet in front of you

A need --

The way water is needed for humans to survive

Meshing together --

Like cat and mouse.

Reviews

[crybabykylie]

i like the heart beat made me feel as if it was pumping.. i agree maybe add more lines but super good

[Jane]

This is really good! You have great use of detail! I actually felt what was being described in the poem XD
You should try to expand off it :D