Hindsight

Hindsight

A Poem by Gem
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Something that came to mind and woke me up at some ungodly hour in the process. A lot has happened in the past few months and this is one of the few pieces of literature that has come from the chaos of my thoughts.

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...With this ring, I thee wed.
For you my heart, too much has bled.
To give myself in sickness and in health
Was worth much more than I held in wealth
'Till death do us part...

You no longer hold the strings tied on my heart.

© 2008 Gem


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I like the bulk of the poem, but I think the last line gives it a disjointed feeling. You may want to try working that last line in, or up to the main strophe.

I really like the way it began with elispses, as if the poem itself was actually starting in the middle of something, like and event. That gave it an interesting twist.

Posted 16 Years Ago



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Gem
Gem

Cardiff, United Kingdom



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I'm a 22 year-old undergraduate student in Cardiff, Wales. I'm studying Biomedical Science and use my writing as a vent for emotions and trials that occur through life. I like to explore the darker si.. more..

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