Rain

When it's raining all day long
I sit indoors and draw
All the lives I daydreamed of
The ones I'd lived before

The love that filled my stomach
And danced around my heart
It was the beauty of life I saw
Then the rain began to start

Pouring pouring all day long
C'est jolie et moi
C'est jolie et tu
Pouring pouring all day long
It's lovely with me
It's lovely with you

Reviews

[emipoemi]

I hate to do this to a poem that flows relatively well, is well-constructed and has some good imagery. But when you have a line in another language, it's best to be grammatically correct (poetic license doesn't cover interlinguistics): C'est joli AVEC moi/C'est joli AVEC TOI (and this is if your final couplet is what you were going for with the French lines, and the "joli" and not "jolie" is because you're speaking neutrally which often takes the masculine form). Well written overall.

[Tony Jordan]

This would make a great little song.
It's wayy better than that 'It's Friiiday' song off of Youtube and that went viral !
Nicely done Sophie.