a blood sucker for life

 Im an ordinary girl sitting her wondering what to do in life. when i know that my life is about to change because i just found out that that mother or what ever she is .she is a blood sucking demon with bright red eyes that shine like the blood of a human.she so attractive that any guy will fall for her,her hair is gold as the stars  but what they don't know is that she not human and i really dont know anything about my father all i know is that he slept with my mother and she had me.my real name is rose but my mother loves to call me her little doll.i just wonder with how many man my mother slept with!mom may talk to you.yea whats do you want to talk about ??i want to talk about my father.what do you mean by your father i told you that he did not love you and that he left.tell me the truth im not a baby no more. i need the truth.OK you want the truth.YES MOTHER I DO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!you father was a a*s hole he did not know what was in front of him so i bit him and turned him in to a vampire. even tho he had the carmes of a 19 year old he had light blue eyes that shine like the sea,his hair was red as the fire but looks don't matter what really matters is that i get everything my way.doll u know your a blood sucker too so why don't you put it to good use and suck the blood of the guy you love to have him eating off you hand.so that's why i always wanted to kill my friends and that's why i cant eat anything normal all this years i have been eating live chicken and cows.mother i cant live like this .WHAT HAVE YOU DONE TO ME !!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I wanted to be a normal girl but i guess now I cant.Now that you mother have ruind my life forever.
IM MOVING  far away from my mother and every one that surounded me  to start a new life.i just arrived at forks a smalle town with  a lots to do.im starting school as junior but that dose not matter because what ever grade im in no one notices me....im a very quite person the one that suffores in the inside.Im 18 and in have never had a boyfriend in my whole life.may be  because im ugly but i dont really know what it is or whats up with me.my mother is gorgeouse and me i have red hair.im really pale,and im not the biggest nor the smallest person in the world.when i enter my drama class no one whanted to work with me .a few weeks whent by.in my drama class their was a new echanged student looking at me like no other guy has ever looked at me before.alll i could think of is "could it really be"

Author's Note

please dont stop reading im not done ill finish it!!!!!

Reviews

[Raya Avans]

This could possibly be a good story.. but you rushed through it so much so fast it just became sort of obnoxious. You really need to slow down and set out more of a platform if you want to get anywhere with this. Also, I would change the name of the town, its non climatic, 'forks' we all know the area, its familiar, create something new. A lot could be done with grammar, don't give up, but it remains to be said, it needs a lot of work.