when two stars go on a ride

 

When Two Stars Go On A Ride

By: Zack Steele

 

Two stars went on a ride

Just to have some fun,

The two became great friends

But they didn’t invite the sun;

 

While the two stars were on their ride

They flew throughout the space

Flying fast, having fun

 Gaining speed and pace;

 

The two had a blast

But the sun was alone,

He sat up in the sky

While everyone was gone;

 

As he sat and waited by himself

Along came the moon,

The two sat and talked

And found love very soon.

 

Now the sun shines brighter than ever

Because now he has a friend,

When two stars go on a ride-

The moon will rise again.

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Delightfully penned. Would make a lovely illustrated story in poetic form for children. Great imagery and I'm fond of rhyme too.

Chris

[❀ Gabriela ..]

Aw, that was wonderful! I loved it! Great poem!

[DearSweetAgony]

Aww, this was a cute and happy piece, I have to say I wasn't expecting this sort of writing from your 'About Me' page. But this write s simply wonderful.

[Hayley]

Wow this is so creative! All of your wording and language in this poem makes every line beautiful. Great write!