Invisible Man

Invisible Man

 

Am I invisible?

Or am I just fine

I’ve noticed

 I’m being unnoticed

Is it all just in my mind?

 

Your disrespect is detectable

Am I misreading the signs?

Overlooked and under-appreciated

Maybe you’re the one who’s blind.

 

Not seeing me for who I am

And keeping my light confined

But hiding a star in the dark

Will only increase its shine

 

There are too many who are unseen

Disregarded and ignored

I hope they heed my transparency

And these words strike a chord  

 

Because the world is full of ghosts

With their heads in the sand

A visual all too visible

Only seen by an invisible man

Reviews

[lovejulez03]

This was a wonderful read. Very well written and I read it several times - it struck home for me. The feeling and sincerity jumped out at me. "Not seeing me for who I am/And keeping my light confined/But hiding a star in the dark/Will only increase its shine" - beautiful and simple. Well done my friend!

[Sirius King]

thank you Julez, i appreciate that!

[lovejulez03]

Anytime!

[Katelyn]

"Not seeing me for who I am
And keeping my light confined
But hiding a star in the dark
Will only increase its shine"

I love these lines especially. You write with such honesty and don't hold back from how you feel. I could definitely relate to this and you really did a great job in capturing an emotion that so many of us feel, but often do not express. Keep up the good work. 100/100

Kate

[Blank_fortunes]

Thank you #1 for letting us know we are not alone we can see each other clearly and it is okay for us to come out. What a wonderful piece of work.

[Sirius King]

thank you!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Very enjoyable, he is a familiar character who was nice not to see again ( ha ha), though your poem is really good.

[Sirius King]

lol...thanks Sheema!

How have u been?

[CHRIS ANDES]

nice choice of words
i can straightly hear the tune
:)

[Sirius King]

Thank you musicfunk!

[H. A. M.]

"But hiding a star in the dark
Will only increase its shine' I like that.
They can't see the person as they are because...they don't picture them in that light. Hate when that happens.
This could turn into one of those long great pieces. Nice.

[Sirius King]

Thank you H.A.M!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

I think this is great.
So meaningfull and from the heart, touching and emotional.
I loved the read :)
Keep writing

[Sirius King]

thank you!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

your welcome :)

[TheSweet]

Very interesting read. All too common the invisible man, very un-ironically, goes unnoticed. But all you have to do is look. Which is something this poem makes you want to do. Well done for a wonderful read. :)

[Sirius King]

thank you!

[Karen]

I read this poem from a poet's perspective. I wrote a poem about whether I'm a real poet in my anonymity, or is my poet status based simply on my ability to write poetry. In other words, am I visible if I'm being unnoticed. This turns that whole concept around and puts the weight of responsibility on the reader. After all, as the poem states, "hiding a star in the dark will only increase its shine." Great poem! Thanks for writing and sharing it with us!

[Sirius King]

i like your take on it, thank you Karen!

[Brad]

well put, the creative mind creates to be noticed...to relate what's inside us...we don't want to be invisible, we don't want to be a peice of furniture in the room..."pay attention to us d****t!!"

[Sirius King]

i agree

Thank you Brad!

[MAGIC]

There are too many who are unseen
Disregarded and ignored
I hope they heed my transparency
And these words strike a chord

you said it all... they strike a chord. we will sing along. thank you for great poetry Serenus

[Sirius King]

Thank you for reading!