Crumbling Castles

Crumbling Castles

Rusted Crowns

 Thrones Collapsing  

To Common Grounds

 

Paper Skyscrapers

Hit With Paper Planes

Toppled House of Cards

Who’s Winning This Game?

 

 Grand Mansions on the East

 Beach Homes on the West

With Just Enough Room

For a “Suitable” Guest

 

Barbie’s Dream Home

Has a Nightmare of a Mortgage

Ken Can’t Find Extra Income

Because of the Job Shortage

 

Golden Parachutes Glide

Landing on Wall -Street

While Main-Street Slides

 Struggling To Get on Their Feet

 

Chipping Away At Your Heart

Demolishing Your Home

Giants Fall the Hardest

Following in the Footsteps of Rome

 

Crumbling Castles

Rusted Crowns

 Thrones Collapsing  

To Common Grounds

 

Oval Office

Official Seals

Listen Closely

The Rumbling is Real

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow this is good stuff...reminds me of a line in "gold dust woman" by fleetwood mac.

"rulers make bad lovers, better put your kingdom up for sale"

all the high society, all of the phoniness, the plastic imagery that is society today...all captured so well here.

the castles are definitely crumbling.

[Sirius King]

thanx Jacob! its always good to hear from u

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Ah, this so sad, there is a mood of struggle in every line and I hope that writing this poem has served you well as an venting outlet, take care Serenus my friend

[Sirius King]

thanx Sheema :-)

[luviva]

well, you presented the idea of life..
nothing lives forever, each and everything has its crumbling point.
love the comparision to ROME... because if its crumbling point comes, it will be proper bad..!!
nice stuff n thanxx for sharing

[Sirius King]

thanx luviva!

[Trigorin]

Not bad. I'd suggest not capitalizing every single word, as it makes the piece look a little unfocused. You have a good concept and you've expanded on it well. Good use of imagery, and although I think there's a few weak stanzas, overall this is very well-done. Good work.

[Sirius King]

I'm actually rethinking some of the stanzas, thanx for checking it out!