Love Me….Please?

Love me

              …please?

Hear me plead

There is nothing worse

Than the sight of a grown man

Begging

…on his knees

 

Love me

         …now

Do you remember how?

Breaker of promises

Betrayer of vows

 

Love me

        … authentically

Without draining my energy

Give back what you took

Love in truth

Unconditionally

 

Love me

…please?

Don’t go

Don’t leave

At least take this stake out of my heart

And hold me while I bleed

 

Love me

…or lie to me

At least sing your goodbyes to me

Until the love I have for you

Slowly

Completely

Dies in me

Author's Note

quick write...needs work...tell me what u think

Reviews

[Sugar Plum ♥]

Really powerful write, I liked mostly the end, which makes a sadness arise in me...Everyone needs love, sometimes people want to be "cheated" just to escape from loneliness. You need this love, until it kills your own feelings and senses. But then...Why breaker of promises? As you feel love, you dont want to feel, as so many times we can`t choose what is inside heart.

-- nour --

[Sirius King]

love is a complicated feeling... sometimes too complicated for words...you know?


thank u Sugar Plum :-)

[Sugar Plum ♥]

maybe I know sometimes .. :) thank u too! I would like to read more

[Ink Seductress]

Wow, to be honest I feel that there is nothing more you can add to such a piece. This piece has a depth to it that scratches the surface of our ignorant beliefs. I loved it. Excellent write!

[PoetInTheMaking]

*jaw drops* WOOOOOW. :0 This is is amazing. I only made this account just to say that. Your writing is incredible! Keep it up! :D

[Sirius King]

Thank you Poet! that is a great compliment! :-)

[sivan]

it's beautiful. it starts off begging for love and then ends begging for false love at least until your own love has diminished... really strikes a cord in my heart

[Sirius King]

thank you sivan!

[icelandicblue]

I really like the format. There was a plaintive quality that worked well but the reader knew despite all the requests this love wasn't going to make it. It was too unbalanced and too late. Sad really.

[Sirius King]

thank u ice!

[passionberry]

Your great at writing serenus omg I still have alot of work to do I just free write my thoughts but yours is awesome

[Sirius King]

Thank u Tam! I think your a great writer too, I'm glad ur on this site!

[Chris Rampersad]

Dude you're really really talented I like this poem the way it is.

[Sirius King]

Thank u Chris!

[Adultwritter1988]

I think you have done well, for a quick poem, I understand your pain been down that road a time oe two myself, theres is no shame in ones pain.

[Sirius King]

thanks man

[Antoñyo]

Liked it as is... A potent expression of emotion, desperation even, that's great to see from a male.
I'll tell anyone, "if you're a male and want to write (or sing, it applies here) check that damn ego at the door!"
Great job in doing that in your writing. Awesome to see. Keep it up

[Sirius King]

very true,

thank you Antonyo!