Love Me….Please?

Love Me….Please?

A Poem by Sirius King

Love me

              …please?

Hear me plead

There is nothing worse

Than the sight of a grown man

Begging

…on his knees

 

Love me

         …now

Do you remember how?

Breaker of promises

Betrayer of vows

 

Love me

        … authentically

Without draining my energy

Give back what you took

Love in truth

Unconditionally

 

Love me

…please?

Don’t go

Don’t leave

At least take this stake out of my heart

And hold me while I bleed

 

Love me

…or lie to me

At least sing your goodbyes to me

Until the love I have for you

Slowly

Completely

Dies in me

© 2013 Sirius King


Author's Note

Sirius King
quick write...needs work...tell me what u think

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Really powerful write, I liked mostly the end, which makes a sadness arise in me...Everyone needs love, sometimes people want to be "cheated" just to escape from loneliness. You need this love, until it kills your own feelings and senses. But then...Why breaker of promises? As you feel love, you dont want to feel, as so many times we can`t choose what is inside heart.

-- nour --

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sirius King

11 Years Ago

love is a complicated feeling... sometimes too complicated for words...you know?


.. read more
Sugar Plum ♥

11 Years Ago

maybe I know sometimes .. :) thank u too! I would like to read more



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Wow, to be honest I feel that there is nothing more you can add to such a piece. This piece has a depth to it that scratches the surface of our ignorant beliefs. I loved it. Excellent write!


Posted 10 Years Ago


*jaw drops* WOOOOOW. :0 This is is amazing. I only made this account just to say that. Your writing is incredible! Keep it up! :D

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sirius King

10 Years Ago

Thank you Poet! that is a great compliment! :-)
it's beautiful. it starts off begging for love and then ends begging for false love at least until your own love has diminished... really strikes a cord in my heart

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Sirius King

10 Years Ago

thank you sivan!
I really like the format. There was a plaintive quality that worked well but the reader knew despite all the requests this love wasn't going to make it. It was too unbalanced and too late. Sad really.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sirius King

11 Years Ago

thank u ice!
Your great at writing serenus omg I still have alot of work to do I just free write my thoughts but yours is awesome

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sirius King

11 Years Ago

Thank u Tam! I think your a great writer too, I'm glad ur on this site!
Dude you're really really talented I like this poem the way it is.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sirius King

11 Years Ago

Thank u Chris!
Really powerful write, I liked mostly the end, which makes a sadness arise in me...Everyone needs love, sometimes people want to be "cheated" just to escape from loneliness. You need this love, until it kills your own feelings and senses. But then...Why breaker of promises? As you feel love, you dont want to feel, as so many times we can`t choose what is inside heart.

-- nour --

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sirius King

11 Years Ago

love is a complicated feeling... sometimes too complicated for words...you know?


.. read more
Sugar Plum ♥

11 Years Ago

maybe I know sometimes .. :) thank u too! I would like to read more
I think you have done well, for a quick poem, I understand your pain been down that road a time oe two myself, theres is no shame in ones pain.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sirius King

11 Years Ago

thanks man
Liked it as is... A potent expression of emotion, desperation even, that's great to see from a male.
I'll tell anyone, "if you're a male and want to write (or sing, it applies here) check that damn ego at the door!"
Great job in doing that in your writing. Awesome to see. Keep it up

Posted 11 Years Ago


Sirius King

11 Years Ago

very true,

thank you Antonyo!

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Sirius King

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