Catch Me If You Can

I’m too fast

I’m too swift

You never seem to catch my drift

 

I came prepared

Unwilling to share

…Victory is my scent

 

You can try

As I whiz by

To breathe deep and catch a whiff  

 

I don’t sweat

As quiet as it’s kept

…I ooze pure bliss

 

I gotta love me

Because I know you hate me

…I’m truly hit or miss

 

You can’t beat me

So just join me

In my world-

Defeat does not exist

I cause collateral damage

Whenever I’m challenged

Unafraid to give Death a kiss

 

So get your head out of the sand

And catch me if you can

So I can X your name off of my list

 

It’s time to face the torment

I hope someone records this

It’s the first time in history

A hare eats the dust of a tortoise!

Author's Note

im a lil rusty lol...tell me what u think

Reviews

[luviva]

wow.. this is soo good!!
the ryhme, the structure word choice and the tone just make it so irresistable!!
i dont know what was in your head when writing this i dont even get the theme, but it made me smie because of its flow.
i think the idea here is time!!
coz it just passesby in whizz and can never be caught!!
loved it !! 1000% if that exists lollzz

[Sirius King]

lol...thanx for checking it out

my idea was the story of the tortoise and the hare...i wanted to paint a picture of what could be going thru the mind of the tortoise- not making him a wimp...if that makes any sense lol

[luviva]

yeh actually i get it if u put it tht way..

[Sirius King]

there are other meanings in there too, but that was the thought behind it

[luviva]

i dont knw y i didnt c the pics before..

[Sirius King]

i put them up after u commented lol

[luviva]

ohh yeh figure tht!
enwe nice job!!

[Sirius King]

lol thanks again

[KAOlmsted]

I love this; I purposely did not scroll down to the picture as I was reading (I like to save things like that for the end...it's a kimmer thing) ;-) And I am so glad I didn't, because it would have given away that great ending! Here I'm thinking you're talking smack against some f****r who needs smack talked at him and I'm all Yeah! Then I get to the end I'm like HA! :-D I loved it.. Thanks for sharing it, SR...glad to see that writer's block finally lifted! (p.s. my RRs are back on...you write anything else...anything...you RR me!)

[Sirius King]

im glad u like it! lol
...yea im tryna get back at it lol

...will do!!!

[KAOlmsted]

:-D

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the title and the purpose of the poem. Always good to have a challenge. I like the pace of the poem and the very good ending. Than you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Sirius King]

thanx for ur review Coyote :-)