The Moon's Gloom

The Moon's Gloom

(Poem by Serenus)

 

The Sun

Big and bold

 Is the king of the skies

No one can outshine him

And they all know better

Than to try

 

The moon

Hopes to one day bloom

And shine just as bright

But his shyness keeps him in the dark

So he only appears at night

 

Mars flirts with the stars

Earth is bursting with life

Venus flaunts her beauty

Eclipsing the moon as they all pass by

 

But he never gives up

He always shows up

And gleams with grace

In the intricate dance of the Milky Way

He always keeps his place

 

Powerfully commanding oceans to behave

He can stir up a serene sea

He is a guiding light in the darkest nights

And some say, he can sway human beings

 

Comforting is his quietness

Brilliant in his glow

Radiant in his wholeness

It’s a shame he doesn’t know…

Author's Note

a quick write- i may make changes later

Reviews

[The Refined Poet]

This is an awesome write for sure. The personification of the stars and planets is well done. Reading it reminds me of people and their differing personalities. Many people can relate to being like the moon. I loved the opening stanza about the sun... made me laugh. But my stanza of choice was,

Powerfully commanding oceans to behave
He can stir up a serene sea
He is a guiding light in the darkest nights
And some say, he can sway human beings

nicely done...

[Sirius King]

lol...i kinda laughed when i wrote the first stanza..but reading it back the sun could represent God in this,thanx man!... and yea the moon compares its self to the other planets (personalities) not realizing hes just as special

im glad u chose that stanza, because i was reconsidering it...but i do like it tho

thanx again

[Tate Morgan]

Eternal isnt it the night sky it will barely change in our lifetime.And while it guides sailors to safety it takes our hearts on a voyage of romantic optimism

[Sirius King]

maybe what they say is true..."its all written in the stars" :-)

thanx for reading

[Pax]

cool... i like the use of the planets...it makes it more a painted words in a canvas...

[Sirius King]

thanx
:-)

[Allyson Wolfe]

I like this alot. I love the personification of nature and this is the first piece that stuck out to me when taking a glance at your work. (: Great write.

[Sirius King]

thanx for checking it out! :-)

[JayBird]

This is stunning. So simple, yet it captures so many images. Beautiful write.

[Sirius King]

thanxx! i appreciate that :-)