They Call Me Gifted

FreeStyle Poem

They call me gifted

I got it down to an exact science

You can call me scientific

Poetry personified

Powerfully prolific

 Rhythmic

So addicting you’ve become dependent

You’re so lost in me

You have no choice

But to defend it

 I’ve turned you into a believer

When you were just a cynic

You’re sick

I’ve infected you

Sending you to the clinic

Untreatable

Wide reachable

My mind is an epidemic

A disease that destroys

The things that you

 Were taught to mimic

And shows you

That the world around you

Is a cleverly designed gimmick

They call me prophetic

I say no

I’m just not afraid to

Point out the pathetic

Power hungry people

Whose sincerity is synthetic

The futures in their hands

And you’re content to let it?

Some call it rhetoric

I call them irrelevant

Speaking out of the side

 Of their necks

Hand held out for paychecks

Employed by evil-Ignoring the Hell of it

 

They call me gifted

But they can have the same gift

If they open their minds

Don’t disregard the signs

Refuse to stand stiff

Then watch the world shift

Author's Note

Reviews

[Samuel Jack]

I really want to try something like this, I keep sitting down to write a poem for America, but I'm not American, so I just get what I see on t.v, I'm sure being there is a whole different kettle o' fish. You've got (in my opinion) a hip hop flavour, but I do see your work first and foremost as poetry. Good work sir

[Sirius King]

i think a poem from your "outside" point of view would be just as compelling...u may have a better picture of it than i do :-)

there are definitely hip hop elements to my poetry, I consider myself a songwriter and singer above all else, and i'm sure it shows thru all of my writing.

thanks Sam!

[Samuel Jack]

Your welcome. I'm gonna do some hip hop, it's gonna be some lame a*s English white boy rap, but here we go.
F**k the nerd rap b***h's, one by one I'm pullin out raps stitches , handin out wolf tickets, cause when you get into the thick of it, I ain't timid, there's no limit to what I'd do to keep my fan in white pickets, smash ya legs like rickets, have you singing sad songs like crickets, ghost you in the dark like riddick-ulas flows smash ya abdominals, travel up through ya spine and out thru ya nose. Lol

[Sirius King]

ok ok ok i feel it lol...pretty damn good

i'm not much of a rapper,
im more of a soul singer
but u better believe
im crushin bones
if you ever point a finger
to battle me-you'll be
another lyrical casualty
then i'll sing your soul to sleep
at ur funeral, i'll even speak
kiss ur granny with a smile
and whisper somethin sweet
she'll never know
I'm the reason ur deceased
See, with this thing called words
i'm a f****n beast
and rippin other rappers hearts out
is how i f****n eat
...may u rest in peace

lol...i'm not much of a freestyler either :-))

[KAOlmsted]

I swear I've read and reviewed this piece before but I don't see my smiling face down below (ha! Now there's some imagery for ya!) ;-) Well, SR, it's brilliant. I thought so the first time I read it and I have to wonder what the hell I was doing that was so damn important that I didn't say so back then...I'm saying it now. Brilliant.

[Sirius King]

lol... i thought u would like it,
when i didnt see a comment from u...
i had to give u a nudge ;-))

thanx!

[KAOlmsted]

Every now and then I get a little senile, so nudge away :-D And, of course, it's always my pleasure.

[Sirius King]

I have the same problem lol...so I'll keep that in mind..if i can remember ;-)

[KAOlmsted]

;-)

[s y e]

I love this, every last word, can't say much more.
Awesome job!!

[Sirius King]

thanx! :-)

[s y e]

Welcome! :-)

[MOON]

Love the way the write is ironic ,lovely deep flowing write.

[Sirius King]

thanx for checking it out! :-)

[Frieda P]

Epic, and I never say that! Love 'talking out of the side of their necks'...I love this, every last word, can't say much more. Pen on..........

[Sirius King]

thanx Frieda!!!

*blushing* lol

[Frieda P]

haha, welcome.
and I love Mr. Hathaway I forgot to say :-)

[Sirius King]

he is my favorite...'a song for you' especially

[BLACK PRINCE]

COOL POEM. I APPRECIATE THE FACT THAT YOUR POEMS ARE LACED WITH DEEPER TRUTHS.
BECAUSE I BELIEVE THAT AS POETS, WE SHOULD SEEK, PREACH, REACH AND TEACH

[Sirius King]

i agree 100%

thanx again

[The Refined Poet]

this is an awesome write. This needs to be performed as a spoken word most definitely.

[Sirius King]

thanx man, i love spoken word...especially from the Def Poetry Jam poets

[Ronald Ayers]

You are gifted. Good writing. The structure of the poem is solid without resorting to much Iambic Pentameter. The symbolism seems to teeter between nihlism and optimisim. Which is it? Good poem. Intresting read.

[Sirius King]

thanx!..its a little bit of both i guess lol... i can be "preachy" at times, but only because i know positivity is possible, no matter how negative the situation may seem :-)

thanx for checking it out

[Sunny Skye]

That's right my friend! I am sick :P But I am also like this so I understand. Well written I like the flow and the rhythm. Good job!

-SkyeBlanco

[Sirius King]

thanx thanx thanx! lol once again :-))

[Sunny Skye]

My pleasure :D

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

I really, really enjoyed this great write. It may be free style, but it has depth. Great work.

[Sirius King]

thanx for checking it out! :-)

[MachinaWriter]

Loved it, man. This kind of style is ridiculously fun to write, isn't it? Its writing like this that I've found the most enjoyment doing lol Great work man, it had a sick flow to it and a good meaning. Keep it up.

[Sirius King]

thanx for checking it out...yes i love free-style, especially when im in a really creative mode...i didnt know how this would turn out when i started, but by the end, it became one of my favorite pieces...thanx again

[MachinaWriter]

I felt the same with that Liberty and Treachery poem and its follow up, "Uprising", but they both turned out being my favorite poems. I wasn't sure what I was doing when I started, or where it would go, or how it would turn out, but I ended up being pretty pleased with both of them.

[Sirius King]

thats always the best...because u have no clue where it comes from lol

[MachinaWriter]

It comes from someone way smarter than me, I know that much lol

[Sirius King]

i feel u on that lol