bird

God's creation

Today I saw an airplane,
A flutter in the sky
Perfectly engineered.

Author's Note

An old poem I wrote around year 2013.
Thanks for taking the time to read.

Reviews

[Aerielle Louise]

The poem is great. Short yet meaningful. I was amazed on how you appreciate the beauty of God's creation. How nice of you.

[Ricky Campbell]

I feel this could have a little more too it.. Not sure, maybe a stronger connection to a bird or beauty of human engineering creating such a wonderful device.

[serenae_dc]

Hello, Ricky! What I was trying to convey was the idea of a bird being one of God's "perfectly engineered" creations. Thanks for the review

[Devanshu Rajput]

WoW! A nicely crafted haiku. I enjoyed it. Many thoughts, conveyed, using less words.

Devanshu

[RiverRei]

This isn't a haiku...it's format is 5, 7, 5 using syllables. The format for this poem is 7, 6, 6. This is just an interesting poem with few words :)

[Devanshu Rajput]

I am deeply sorry about that. I didn't much attention uon the syallables. Being, a haiku lover, I see it, in every, three lined poem.

But, the poem is a spot on, I must say that.

Devanshu

[serenae_dc]

It's not a Haiku. But thank you for the compliments, riverrei and devanshu. :)

[Jamestown]

Fantastic analogy, well written! Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[serenae_dc]

Thank you, Jamestown. Be-blessed to you as well. :)