This Killing Mood~

It collects in a globule at the corner of a scrape

a red cape

through space takes on motion between the quirky smile

and the dangerous tapping of a shoe on polished wood

soot on leather

gently toe the line

the white palm open for the drop of blood

caught

the paint turns burgundy with intent

splash of emotions

the work of art captures the three dimensional canvas

the condition of being alive

in an arena

where the walls scream

and the forest outside whispers with sharp teeth

the light bulb flickers with shadows

ghosts slip their veils

and everything from birth to this moment

collects its trails in the silver veins

of a knife;

tip and tap goes the shoe

tap and tip goes the buttered mood

tipped from a cutting board

into a hollow sternum

the fresh croissants spin through a dynamic air

peppered with spatial aortal blood

in midflight

 

 

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Reviews

[OT]

hmm we can melt into your words ha - descriptions that coat the eyes in colour - "the light bulb flickers with shadows
ghosts slip their veils
and everything from birth to this moment
collects its trails in the silver veins
of a knife;" - Very jealous of the amount of gems you're knocking out!!!!!! brilliantly untuned, detuned and retuned as always!!!

[Fran Marie]

tip and tap goes the shoe
tap and tip goes the buttered mood


am lovin' the above lines and the vivid descriptives in this piece of art, another fine piece penned by your talented pen!!

[MuSe Ampoule]

"soot on leather
gently toe the line
the white palm open for the drop of blood
caught
the paint turns burgundy with intent
splash of emotions"

What??!!! This was awesome! by the end I imagined you throwing daggers at a dragon with an apple atop his head. *oooh shucks I missed*
Loved it!

[HeIsWe]

cool

[Brad]

the fresh croissants spin through a dynamic air
peppered with spatial aortal blood
in midflight

damn...now i'm thirsty...where's my knife?

[Aidz]

Lushness of visuals steer my intent in reading these lines towards with a bloody ending... lick lick of the peppered air

[FireWoman]

Torturous and inhumane this pain. I do not have all of the answers, but I am sure to ask the Great One in the sky as soon as I arrive. Why must this exist? Why must the old & the young suffer, it knows no boundaries. It infuriates me! I hope to h*** I don't get the standard, "it makes us stronger" or "God only gives us as much as we can handle" bit.
You bleed beautifully, but it hurts just the same.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

The dangerous tapping of a shoe on polished wood.......a white palm catches blood. The condition of being alive as a light flickers in shadows. Collected in the silver veins of a knife plunged into a hollow sternum..........wicked!

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Impressive, almost haunting piece. A lot of visuals came to mind, but it all came together in the end. You are not afraid to show off your talent. And it comes out greatly within your work.

Great write!
Keep writing.

[Cafe Reader]

Yet another amazing poem from your enchanted mind! Excellent!

[asdarkeyesclose]

'the condition of being alive'

Astonishing how many views this has had and it was only written yesterday which is, I believe, good news for poetry in general. This is full of twists and turns, the foot tip, tapping the only repeated image, the only idea that rises above the stream of abstract reasoning. I liked that sense of emotion entwined in art, maybe in a roman arena, maybe in an unromantic kitchen. Loved the 'sharp teeth' of the forest whispers and the way you moved effortlessly image to image. Stunning!