The Crystal Aspect Of Vision~

The city looks beautiful

from this perspective

each scar refracted by a tear globule

every broken shell

bleeds golden yolk

and I find my fingertips

covered with thistle

my fleece in a puddle

progeny

breaking me at every turn

 

I find it almost peaceful

to give my last piece of shell

and be revealed

 

My towers are not perfect

they are missing struts

and my windows were never

really

reinforced

and my doors were always opened

just so much

but not enough

I see

 

There’s a jumping off point for the soul

I found it

in the element of disappointment

 

The city looks beautiful

from this perspective

my feet find the air

comforting

the wind

under my skin

arrow points

of rapture

 

 

 

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Reviews

[Kerry O'Connor]

and my windows were never
really
reinforced
and my doors were always opened
just so much
but not enough
I see...

And yet they never see the obvious... and that wind beneath the skin is too cold to offer any real comfort, I fear, and the plummet too final.

[David W Moore III]

Hmmm this feels a little like something I might write. (although not as well as you, of course my literary queen yes I said...) there is that bit of torment just under the surface (unless I just brought extra of mine ;)~ )

[JelliFyshKissUs]

I... didn't... review this? Gasp!
You always remind us of those sincere flaws that make you the most fractal and prismatically beautiful you. But those words. Those words you have knitted together to make this candid thought that floats in you cerebral are masterful. They cut and scape, nick and nibble.... right at our chest. We've seen this world... know this world... thought we knew it... thought we knew how it felt to get swept up in it... to have our perspective fractured...until we read something like this. And then we realize we don't know the half of it... yet.
This is a favorite. Your words must live on my shelf... to place in my heart anytime I wish. Thank you, dovely.

[FireWoman]

The imperfections that you perceive are just proof that you are real and that you have lived. Beyond your sugar coated words, there is a depth that you often shrug off as normal.

You are extraordinarily unique in that your beauty radiates from the inside out. The irony is by shedding your shell bit by bit it should be crystal clear who you are, but most do not take the time to look beyond their own ego.

[SilentVerses]

Adore it, beautifully stunning in the turns the writing takes, you have breathed into your words the gift of life and they come alive creating the imagery provided by your sensual description nothing missed, beautiful structure manipulated for greatest impact, love it. Sensual and haunting in its hidden despair.

[Brad]

thank you for sharing the world through your eyes....now i need bifocals.....

[Larry Dyson]

Crystal clear but piercing.

[OT]

ahh the plummet - fall - the fear - the city looks so beautiful from that perspective - sad undertones - "there's a jumping off point for the soul I found it in the element of disappointment" - what a line!! loved it!

[ScaryTrees]

you got style
sweet riff this
first and last stanzas my favorites
killer

[Liza]

from the perspective of height and distance; things do seem beautiful, strong and flawless...don't they?

We get closer and can't help but observe the weaknesses and chips...

thought provoking piece.

[LilyT]

Your heart breaking, heartbreaking.


The city looks beautiful
from this perspective
my feet find the air
comforting
the wind
under my skin
arrow points
of rapture