Fresh Water~

My pearls

Broken in fresh water

Shells cracked open between the palms of a hungry man

He’s been at sea forevermore

Storms live in his gray eyes

Now he walks fresh water shores

In muddy boots

His soul as clean as undiscovered coral beds

I am happy to be

The pearl in his pocket

A memory in a brooch at his daughter’s throat

Above lace dreams

Her grip on the boat

Tight

She laughs

My mood ring bauble

Flexing

Blues

Under a sky bleeding topaz rain

As Leon Redbone taps his shoes against an old radio

Floating in fresh water

By a shoreline filled with pearls

 

 

 

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Author's Note

Reviews

[SpokenWord]

You write some of the most beautiful scenes and images that I have seen. This makes me think of so many stories of life that this could fit into. One part of thought of marriage and a father giving his daughter away. I always love how your words flow into the surreal of life.

[Ed Hart]

ah, you went down to the river...without me

[RFD39]

good write

[Sam]

I love it. It potrays a beautiful scene. :)

[Moflo]

This really was a great portrayal of a beautiful scene. Fantastic descriptions and great imagery, very nicely painted picture. Great job.

[Haim Kadman]

I love it dear Jewel, particlarly


















I love it dear Jewel, particularly:
"I am happy to be
The pearl in his pocket"
A beautiful metaphor...

[Jouni Sakari]

O Dear , you painted the rain , and then let me see it ! , I've been there , and there my heart yearns ! pearls ! I love the packet you delivered :)

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

A beautiful, grey atmosphere appears from the mist of an unfurling story,
such a way with words, making the simplest things, pearls, water seem so beautiful

[writing mojo]

Good God song to inspire great river as word flow....pearls of the most oblique love oval in the shimmer of this poem..If anything you've made me a new fan of Leon Redbone.....good stuff

[Matthew Kult]

You always do have a way with words.

My Mood ring bauble

flexing

blues.

My favorite three lines, and mostly because it reminds me of a long time ago and a young boyhood crush I had on the neighbor girl who wore a mood ring. Simpler times then, in a simpler world. Always charming. Always amazing.

On a side note, I do hope you arent thinking of leaving the site, but I can see your frustration building over the past few months, if you do I would like to know what other site you go too, unless I am one of the many annoyances. I do enjoy reading your work.

Always,

Matthew

[OT]

ahh and we all drift on by in awe lol - so nice - I have to concur with Kerry you are a natural story teller - with your own way of retelling it to us all! imaginative as always! bravo - I love the ending - "Floating in fresh water
By a shoreline filled with pearls"