Ripper~

He whimpers

simple predator on the prowl

to twist her

out of love with a spectacular

bespectacled owl

another male trick with a generic knife

stripping girl with half a shelf life

left

her scent

in the flare of his emasculated game

glare

snap her book of spines

in twain

she flails

a smeared smile

wanes

under his whip her

snap her

hands

and there, then

yes there!

under a night sky bleeding rain

she twists

the point he missed

her prey perfume

shedding its victim hue

in coils

she

unhinges

strikes a deadly pose

whispers in a hiss "Bring it"

he gapes

he's rearranged

she, a hiss "You've the dishonor of being my first,

accursed

of Lilith's rage."

parry

thrust

katana

a gun in her glove

head rolls without the usual sass

her ring a slice of brass

his blood with organic concrete

blended

welcome to the era

of this b***h named Vengeance

 

 

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Author's Note

~how much longer will humanity twiddle its diddle and molly coddle these f***ers who prey on children~another baby dead by the hands of a thing disguised as a man~ and he will get treatment because he is "sick"?~ no, humanity is sick for abiding these beasts amongst us~

Reviews

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

KUDOS! This gave me chills for real! I can empathize with this...it also reminds me of the book and movie 'Perfume' where the protagonist makes perfume out of women - seems this is what this man is after here...truly brilliant poetry. A favorite always!
Light,
Siddartha

[NeonAcidFlowers]

[GlamGirl]

I really like this! This format is how I usually write most of my poems; with short lines.
Great work!

[Serge]

Fan f****ing tastic read. The action and suspense is perfect, the poem grips you as the ripper grips its prey. And the end was excellent and unexpected. Thank You this was amazing.

[Moflo]

I loved the intense description, you can tell you put a lot of effort into the detail of this work and for that, I think it is very well written. I like the imagery and the pacing keeps the reader attached until the end. Great work...don't listen to that Editor prick.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

dear editor~ quite unbecoming to create another profile to rip apart a poem you are incorrectly interpreting and pressing into religious matters~ kindly piss off~ oh lookie my Block button~ *press*

[editor]

and lilith tried to get back to adam as the myth says,,so you are implying that the child went back to the man?..you chose the wrong myth to compare violence of children with a man?

[editor]

and lilith was a DEMON, so you are comparing a child to a demon? this poem does not make sense or comparable to a child violated by a man?

[editor]

Lilith left Adam after she refused to become subservient to him and then would not return to the Garden of Eden after she mated with archangel Samael

[editor]

why are you comparing a grown woman to a child is what I am trying to say..?

[editor]

the jewish myth of lilith is about a woman who would not listen to the first man created..so in turn your poem does not make any sense what so ever..