Ripper~

He whimpers

simple predator on the prowl

to twist her

out of love with a spectacular

bespectacled owl

another male trick with a generic knife

stripping girl with half a shelf life

left

her scent

in the flare of his emasculated game

glare

snap her book of spines

in twain

she flails

a smeared smile

wanes

under his whip her

snap her

hands

and there, then

yes there!

under a night sky bleeding rain

she twists

the point he missed

her prey perfume

shedding its victim hue

in coils

she

unhinges

strikes a deadly pose

whispers in a hiss "Bring it"

he gapes

he's rearranged

she, a hiss "You've the dishonor of being my first,

accursed

of Lilith's rage."

parry

thrust

katana

a gun in her glove

head rolls without the usual sass

her ring a slice of brass

his blood with organic concrete

blended

welcome to the era

of this b***h named Vengeance

 

 

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Author's Note

~how much longer will humanity twiddle its diddle and molly coddle these f***ers who prey on children~another baby dead by the hands of a thing disguised as a man~ and he will get treatment because he is "sick"?~ no, humanity is sick for abiding these beasts amongst us~

Reviews

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

KUDOS! This gave me chills for real! I can empathize with this...it also reminds me of the book and movie 'Perfume' where the protagonist makes perfume out of women - seems this is what this man is after here...truly brilliant poetry. A favorite always!
Light,
Siddartha

[Jacquie]

I personally think this is a very beautiful and very dark poem. Parts of it didn't make sense to me, but I understand that a lot of poems can be like this. Still, good job!

[David W Moore III]

Isn't anyone who could take another life for anything but defense,"sick"? Let's 'fix' them then try and punish. Not death, that's too good (and us sinking to their level) idk what the proper punishment would be... Anyone who could hurt a child... From those of us that have lost one... It is almost unthinkable.

[quinfinn]

i agree whole heartedly ...they should be castrated and force fed their own genitalia. very clever and piercing write!

[Michael Carr]

I found some of these lines to be a bit forced into a rhyme scheme (bespeculed owl, shelf life) which is something I hate to see in rhyming poems.
However, do not take this as a putdown, I simply noticed this as the vast majority of the work flows impossibly well. It attacks this dark theme with fury and I love seeing this kind of passion put to page. Nice to see something that isn't a generic love poem or a tale of loss or crap like that.

Very powerful, very sparse writing that speaks volumes between the lines.

[kmartell]

wow you are good girl. strong treatment of a very hard subject.

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

Very tense and clever, the wordding was brilliant.

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Simply loved the ended..put the woman back in control - we are all blighted by these sick individuals..show put them all in one room with a bar of soap on the floor..one would break..

[nothingnothingforgetfor..]

enlightening, i liked it

[Imara]

great job! I really enjoyed reading it and seeing it in my head gave me the chills!

[Michael X]

Congratulations on the excelleing factor Selene, I wish to achieve this height, and consistancy, your work is written in the essensem of color that unique to you, I always see yellows and reds in your writing, neon pinks, you are a creator to the ideas, I admire the style, you speak of truths and honesty, marvelous!