Highways~

I beached my soul

on a dark highway

caught in the blacklights of a doe's eyes

pupils to back roads

hooves skittering across stones

animal lines blurred

between the break pedal

and the windshield

spider webbing in crystal

my necklace made of blood beads

and blue veins

on a dark highway

where I beached my soul

for a doe

who was living life

while I had wasted most of mine

worrying about

stupid things

 

 

Hoof prints in blood

a black bear with nose to air

nostrils flaring

they don't go by tragedies

they go by scent;

too bad we human things forgot all about the simplicity

of just living

 

 

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Reviews

[Celeste21]

Because of habitat degradation many animals who were living have had to suffer from decreased biodiversity. This poem works on two levels for me. In one, it discusses how we as humans have urbanized so many things that many animals are losing their natural habitat. On another level, it focuses on the trivial humans get caught up in. All this is juxtaposed by disquieting images that resound in your mind. You make everything clear with expert precision.

[honeyleens]

I really love your way of expressing an experience or opinion through surreal imagery and interesting juxtaposition. It really captivates the readers attention (I re-read multiple parts to let the words really soak in). I Liked these lines the best: "my necklace made of blood beads/and blue veins/on a dark highway/where I beached my soul." The ending lines really sum up the meaning behind this. I liked this alot.

[Moflo]

I think the theme of a highway traveling through nature is the perfect depiction of human advances over natural scenes. I love the message of this poem, it is so true, our highways are diverting us from the nature we entail, and we have mostly forgotten about. Great job.

[Dionysios]

Stranded and un-destined.
Secret ornaments and scattered memories.
A simplicity I've been long yearning for...

[writing mojo]

cannibalistic, to the heart driven on blood of a lost love.......that's just human nature in a world of beastly ties
sharing time
like Co2 in the innocent anecdotal rose eaten
out the paws of a lion suffocating
to roar words
through you ...amazing stuff

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

I love this poem and it is filled with wisdom.
last two lines especially.
I wish we could be as wise as the doe.

Chloe

[Victoria]

the images you have are beautiful. love it!

[.]

wow..you nailed a philosophy here..how simple pleasures are missed because of no longer feel..

[lostboy]

when i cant here the music..my soul wastes away.