GrassHopperGirl~

streaming to a poetic challenge from rem~see author's note for explanation~ =)~

Where does a girl place

So much craving

Does she pour it into liquid eye liner

Streamed to her temples

Onyx rouge

Smeared, a bruise in the center of her disguise

Does she bury it in a stack of literature

Stories colliding with the crowd

At the cafeteria entrance

Eyes devouring her unclassifiable existence

 

High school is a b***h

With venom in the bones of her corset

 

There are days where they shred her

She picks up the pieces and fortifies her boundaries

With unbendable grass

There are days where they trip her up

Trick her up

She shakes their blood from the blue of her eyes

And casts the iris into gray clouds

Remaking them into shades

Placing them against a pane of mist glass

 

High school is a b***h

If you ain’t one

 

Where does a girl place

So much craving

She pours it into a tea cup

A Japanese bowl

For grasshoppers playing her melodies

In a flower pot

On a windowsill

Absorbing every bruise into notes

Drinking every hateful word of the day from her pores

Reworking her into fresh magik

Encouraging her to face another day

Rebuilt by a handful of streamlined green grasshoppers

Who have made the curls of her chestnut hair their love ground

Who have made her

Their girl

 

High School is a b***h

If you let it be . . . .

 

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Author's Note

Rem's Challenge~

Your challenge:

Entitle the poem 'The Grasshopper Girl'

The basis should be about a sixteen year old girl who everyone finds terribly odd because she doesnt follow the norm. she should have blue grey eys and curly brown hair.

Reviews

[SpokenWord]

Green text of course goes with this perfectly... I loved this write and yes I love all your writes I know but I have to say it each time. This one is playful in asking the repeating question to which of course I have no answer for, I would say just flaunt it and have them wish over it. Divine, creative, and still amazing!...

Hmm a challenge write, now we have to write one behind your creation, now you know that is more than just a challenge write.. Still it is a tempting challenge and one I should undertake. Excellent write Selene it's perfection!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

To those that wait for no-one, a true slap to society, I;m here and I'll be as I choose to be, well written and catty to no end. Maybe "File it Under Bothered".

[Rossen]

I enjoyed reading this several times,
Also reads remarkably well backwards like the writer wrote both ways~
Cool challenge: met, with powerful green legs...

Rossen

[Siddhartha]

This brims with angst through the prism of an oddball. The world slips through her hand and the world rejects her out of hand. A compelling portrayal here, Selene. I hope that girl really made it on her own. I always yearn for happy endings but life has taught me otherwise.

[Javery Axel Mann]

I thought rouge was red?

Overall, I felt that the poem was pretty powerful, but there were several spots where I questioned what exactly you were writing about. The second full stanza (starting on line 13) got a little confusing ("She shakes their blood from the blue of her eyes/And casts the iris into gray clouds"). The words sound nice together, but what do they mean?

Regardless of how picky I'm being, the piece overall was strong.

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shows your ability to write anything beautifully...highschools a b***h..if you aint one...poignant to laugh..but truth hurts..loved it

[An owl on the moon]

You create such visual stunnery, profoundly voice angst through colors and emotions. Glimpse by glimpse, we step inside her mind.

[Lilly Negoi]

if only for
"a handful of streamlined green grasshoppers
Who have made the curls of her chestnut hair their love ground"
and this poem is a gem!! splendid!

[My Fair Lady]

Ahh.. this is wonderful! Hits the heart of me.. the mother of a struggling artsy student who just can't be a b***h.. even when her day is certainly one.