The Inside Of My Pocket Watch~

The inside of my pocket watch

Heart

Is cobalt blue

They hold the tears of an eleven year old girl

Who found salvation in cirrus clouds

And a sky filled with cotton balloons

To catch her fall upward

From an inverted world

When the monster’s pupil slit for her

And her alone

How privileged was she

To be his next victim

Hardly

But this is a fairy tale

No?

So let’s try to find a happy ending

As she stands

Framed

By Time

Thigh deep in concrete

A pearl in her branches

Supported by little more

Than a spider’s thread. . . .

Arachnid took pity on her

Crawled out of the upper corner of the basement

Distracting her

Spinning silver light against the backdrop

Of the blood moon

While Beetle found a crevice

At the monster’s feet

And gave his life for hers

Because the crunch was enough to disgust

The disgusting monster

His fine leather shoe sole

Sullied

Sullied, she

Found her voice

It matched the sirens

The house took its roots a breath above the ground

Her collapse into diamonds

Scabbed knees in blood

One shot

Two shot

She peeled the gold blossoms from the branches of her bones

Placed them

With her tears

Inside

A pocket watch;

Was this liberation

Or a sort of deeper trap

Who knows

But they always wanted to see her cry

To prove that she was human

 

 

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Reviews

[OT]

ooo I love this one - the story - sad - the descriptions are brilliant - "She peeled the gold blossoms from the branches of her bones" - the anti fairytale - a girl of sin and sorrow - the beetle giving its life for her - it's all so morose almost - melancholic - tim burton-esque ha! bravo!! I love - "but they always wanted to see her cry to prove that she was human"

[EGabriellS]

A very sad story, but i couldn't look away! Very well written.

[Linear]

I wrote a great review for this poem, and then hit the wrong fluffing button and lost it.............loved it is all

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

This is very dark and has such deep sadness about it. The slow and steady fall to the final line.

[Tommy]

Yes, I have to agree with OT, this reminded me of a Tim Burton tale; it played out in my head like one of his movies. You know I have heard that most fairytales are someone's witnessed reality tweaked by a righter's creativity. I like how you pose that question, and this girl sounds very brave to me...

Great Writing Selene!
RLG,
Tommy

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

Such vivid imagery and descriptions. This is tragic but a pure story of melchony feel. Wonferful job

[Robin]

you keep proving your more ~

[LA Lorena]

I'm glad she found her voice, sadly, not all of them do. but they all cry, though they may not show the outside world, the tears are just on the inside. Brilliant imagery, another masterpiece!

[Lachenille Papillion]

This goes places in my soul I know only you comprehend, and I wish you didn't...

As always, you have melded all the perfect words, pictures, senses, feelings, and essences into a beautiful silhouette of the darkest sides and deepest strengths of the human condition. I don't think there has ever been someone so in tune with every pulse of life who has documented such intricate folds of reality as you, dear heart.

[ali]

I am definitely a sucker for insect metaphors. Curious to know who the beetle was, or if it was just a beetle. You make the main point of the story obvious but hide a lot of little details that I think really make the poem. my favorite line was "She peeled the gold blossoms from the branches of her bones", a really disturbing image made beautiful by language.
also, thank you for reviewing my poem, it was much appreciated.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Wow! I have been captivated and completely taken in by your words........this is one fascinating poem......