Amenoukihashi ~ (Floating Bridge Of Heaven)

A sailor went sea

Do you see

Seashells in the pearl Chablis

Sip it slow

Potion  flow

Quid pro quo

Her dreams in dough

Kneading in the afterglow

Supple hands

By the sea

Stirring weather

Dreams in tether

Release

In peace

Her lips cerise

Pursed and proud

Exhale a cloud

Silver smoke

Dream avowed

A vow thus singed

Epic soul

On human binge

Entice the man

Close to the fringe

Don’t cringe

Watch close

Her deep disclosure

Stark exposure

Flash of camera

Strike of lightning

The sailor at the sea edge writing

Hearts in sand

He went to sea

To see what he could see and be

But all that he could see was her

And all that he could be for her

The sailor threw the rope ashore

She caught it in her hands with hope

And on the dock

The hourglass

Gave her sands to happenstance

Table set

The sky repents

Her cloth of white

His touch polite

Dinner comes with twilight hush

Drips of setting sun in blush

The night in crush

Of blue and white

A sailor now a man alright

There at the edge

The deep blue sea

Came to shore to see

Her sailor ample

In his heart

Led by example

Work of art

Under his hands so strong and fair

The sea retraced her waves’ affair

For another sailor come to sea

To see what he could see

And be

 

 

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Author's Note

~Retwist of the Japnese Creation Myth of Izanagi no Mikoto and Izanami no Mikoto With Unwind of the Sailor and the Sea for rebrocade in Hip Hop blitz~ (what the hell did I just say? ;)

Reviews

[OT]

oh yes!!! the rhymes are sublime - they are subtle and then harsh - close and then distant - like the flow of the sea which so ripples through this - it pulls and throws you as the images twist - before leaving a memorable memory and departing!! nice!

[Quinn Blackburn]

Like reading origami, each intricate fold working to create a complete picture

[Nicole]

Beautiful poem!

[Lachenille Papillion]

Cricket, you haven't even begun to unfold a portion of what you have stored in that beautiful head and heart of yours, have you????

I await the books en mass that shall gather at my feet beside my rocking chair and stroke my mind complete as my hair grays away the days in your sweet decrees

[Pax Analog]

Rawbone knives slice a delicate tete-a-tete.

Echoed a long-forgotten goth erotic art flick The Sailor Who Fell from Grace with the Sea, w/Kris Kristofferson.

Love the sinewy lines -- you hear hip hop, I hear alt rock, but that means the lines are lean and adaptable, so coolio!

Sudden impression of bold new whirl of virtual Japanese Cheshire Cat tonguing unAlices, but that's just rude. Your s**t's highly catalytic.

There's also a wistful/ironic chaste tone to this, a sense of unending fresh beginnings.

"Epic soul/On human binge/Entice the man/Close to the fringe/Don’t cringe/
Watch close/Her deep disclosure/Stark exposure/Flash of camera/Strike of lightning"

Words to live by.

[JelliFyshKissUs]

Your hip hop flows are some of my favorite poems. They POP and OOZE down the page with so much flavor... That actually sounds nasty when I read it back to myself. Anyway, Loved it!

[Kerry O'Connor]

I dived into the sparkling blue of your word pool, and didn't draw breath until I had swum the entire length. Superb, Selene.

[Crowley]

How hard is that to keep up that rhyming scheme...s**t fire, that was awesome! Don't know nuttin about the japanese creation myth, but I bet yours is better...I am suitable impressed with your craft.....nice work.

[Amy Bumpas]

This is a beautiful love story of the sea, and the sailor and
his love. You brought the words to life, water flowing, rebirth
for all to hear.