Venus Wept White Roses~

Maiden in her blush

on knees in blossoms crushed

her cheek against a frame

embossed with silver rain

 

A hero dressed in white

ribbed tight the epic kite

he tossed it with a wish

a welling love through the abyss

 

Her auburn hair a veil

she pushed her palm against the gale

fell crossed and through and sideways

a girl reposed in bride days

 

He unbuckled every clasp

and idea in his grasp

he took the bullet from her palm

gave it meaning, fetish charmed

 

And the vase with water deep through body

pushed the blossoms through their folly

as he lay in splatters of white rose

Venus weeping him through prose

 

And epic is as epic does

a goddess through the world amok

ripping blossoms off a bloom

curled around her empty womb

asking

love me

love me not

laughter

maddening

silver shot

white roses pressed against her eyes

god blood painted down her thighs

an arch

a bow

a hunter’s rush

a tapestry unwound, restrung

let’s make it bleed

let’s make it scream

let’s rewrite every epic scene

until every rose has found her song

and the hero relearns right and wrong

a curtsy

bow

bouquet dispersed

Venus pours it in reverse

 

 

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Reviews

[alan peter kelly]

your versatlity....rhyming couplets...a perfect parade...dressed in all its creator's best finery...strong symbolism here...i have a clear idea...but wont discuss it dear...for all parts fit the (w)hole and veils reveal more mystery once they drop away...i pick them up...and put them in a heart shaped box as keepsakes...

[Geralyn Miller]

Mystery meets myth meets enigma. Imagery and beauty coupled with emtion and a touch of earthy longing. E$ach time I read this, a new layer emerges.

[Cherrie Palmer]

you weave images and feeling together with true grace

[wind whisperer.]

awesome ........held me to the end

[zdzd]

Quite good, and well written. I like how you change the style half way through, adds variety.

[Amber Betty Marie Child..]

shining bride and intriguing groom... do you know how epic? dam this could be a classic!

[Bubo]

let’s rewrite every epic scene
until every rose has found her song
and the hero relearns right and wrong.

I found this so sad, almost horrifying that someone can be treated so, but you write with grace and beauty, and the ending was perfect...........like all your writing.

[Alicia Schroeder]

That was/is Beautiful!!

[Crow]

Beautifully done!

[Zackery Alan Daley]

Your poetic talent exceeds any I have seen who have not passed on. Bravo Selene, don't you dare put down the pen or the keyboard. lol :)

Venus poured it in reverse. So I did too. Was it intended to be ambi-poetry? Or was it just a happy accident?