Venus Wept White Roses~

Maiden in her blush

on knees in blossoms crushed

her cheek against a frame

embossed with silver rain

 

A hero dressed in white

ribbed tight the epic kite

he tossed it with a wish

a welling love through the abyss

 

Her auburn hair a veil

she pushed her palm against the gale

fell crossed and through and sideways

a girl reposed in bride days

 

He unbuckled every clasp

and idea in his grasp

he took the bullet from her palm

gave it meaning, fetish charmed

 

And the vase with water deep through body

pushed the blossoms through their folly

as he lay in splatters of white rose

Venus weeping him through prose

 

And epic is as epic does

a goddess through the world amok

ripping blossoms off a bloom

curled around her empty womb

asking

love me

love me not

laughter

maddening

silver shot

white roses pressed against her eyes

god blood painted down her thighs

an arch

a bow

a hunter’s rush

a tapestry unwound, restrung

let’s make it bleed

let’s make it scream

let’s rewrite every epic scene

until every rose has found her song

and the hero relearns right and wrong

a curtsy

bow

bouquet dispersed

Venus pours it in reverse

 

 

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Reviews

[alan peter kelly]

your versatlity....rhyming couplets...a perfect parade...dressed in all its creator's best finery...strong symbolism here...i have a clear idea...but wont discuss it dear...for all parts fit the (w)hole and veils reveal more mystery once they drop away...i pick them up...and put them in a heart shaped box as keepsakes...

[Nobody]

Whoa! Blown away by this one. Especially how it starts in stanzas and kind of melts into godknows what but it rhymes and there's aroma in the lines. You are a poet of the senses, love yer work.

[Kathryneo]

This brings me back to poetry and to how I know you.

[Amanda]

wow. I'm speechless. I love the rhyme scheme you chose, and the description is so vivid and beautifully done, it literally leaves the reader sitting there going "Wow....What just happened?" Marvelously written.

[Art Sun]

nice work Selene...

[Aven]

there is so much beauty in this poem, I love how you paint with words... "white roses pressed against her eyes, god blood painted down her thighs"... such a striking image. :)

[dovetailer]

Even choking in your dust...watching your a*s disappear into the distance...I can't help but appreciate the way your words are crafted into thoughts that would never occur to me in a million years...and to think they just roll out of you like water from a very special tap make them that much harder to comprehend...and believe me...I try very hard to feel the you in everything you write...which, in itself, is quite a pleasure...
Again...again...again...wonderful...

[River Wilson]

Wow, there is nothingn else i can say because this is so beyond me.
This is incredible.

[G. Marie"floating on an..]

beautifully written selene!!!

[Ashley]

wow what an amazing well written poem! i love the way it flows and all of the vocabulary is nice. very nice.