Venus Wept White Roses~

Maiden in her blush

on knees in blossoms crushed

her cheek against a frame

embossed with silver rain

 

A hero dressed in white

ribbed tight the epic kite

he tossed it with a wish

a welling love through the abyss

 

Her auburn hair a veil

she pushed her palm against the gale

fell crossed and through and sideways

a girl reposed in bride days

 

He unbuckled every clasp

and idea in his grasp

he took the bullet from her palm

gave it meaning, fetish charmed

 

And the vase with water deep through body

pushed the blossoms through their folly

as he lay in splatters of white rose

Venus weeping him through prose

 

And epic is as epic does

a goddess through the world amok

ripping blossoms off a bloom

curled around her empty womb

asking

love me

love me not

laughter

maddening

silver shot

white roses pressed against her eyes

god blood painted down her thighs

an arch

a bow

a hunter’s rush

a tapestry unwound, restrung

let’s make it bleed

let’s make it scream

let’s rewrite every epic scene

until every rose has found her song

and the hero relearns right and wrong

a curtsy

bow

bouquet dispersed

Venus pours it in reverse

 

 

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Reviews

[alan peter kelly]

your versatlity....rhyming couplets...a perfect parade...dressed in all its creator's best finery...strong symbolism here...i have a clear idea...but wont discuss it dear...for all parts fit the (w)hole and veils reveal more mystery once they drop away...i pick them up...and put them in a heart shaped box as keepsakes...

[Kenneth The Poet]

Just amazed by this. Amazed, amazing...amazing!

[Shattered Dreams]

Wow, this is fantastic! Wonderful! I only add really really good pieces of writing into my library, but this is going in! The use of words is amazing and I loved the rhyme! Well done!

[Sweet & Tender Hooligan]

A deeply thought provoking piece, rich in imagery and metaphor. The fifth stanza to the end is magnificent. A poetic feast and a treat for the reader's mind.

[Ronn Michael Salinas]

reminds me of Margaret Atwood. nice

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This shows your talent..you rhyme has such ease, trips of the tongue in a songlike quality. Then your subject matter! Well that's the beautiful of Selenism..

[Solidad]

This is a bullet that wounds and then returns to its chamber. Never forgiving nor a drop of remorse. No consolation prize but yet still gifting its victim/reader with a clean wound; even if it is right through the heart. J'adore.

[SpokenWord]

If only we could relearn right from wrong. The beautiful images you paint here with the white roses on eyes but then the sight of God blood down her leg what a sight to see and what of the meaning. I think your work is awesome because of your style and the meaning you put into each verse. When I first starting reading you many things were well over my head and it was hard to understand and I enjoyed you for your talent. However the more I was drawn to read the more I began to see your themes, they are tragic sometimes but even within them I see beauty. You are a powerful writer, who writes from the soul with a rose in one hand of beauty and a sword in the other for balance. I can only hope to reach a similar level with my work one day.

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

Rhymining was brilliant, flowed like water down a stream into the mouth of sunset. What a beauteous piece, (as well with the title).
Stunning!

[Haim Kadman]

A beautiful metaphoric description of utopian relationship. entwined so artistically with myth.

[Christian Adriaensen]

Damn, this is good !!!
This is real good...

Love it and my favourite coming from your pen.