add on: this girl likes constructive criticism served with suggestions~ in answer to the perception of 'pretentious' below me~ the font was chosen for its similarity to ink stains and meant to enhance the poem~and not to elicit snarky comments~ thank you and have a nice day~
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I Absolutely Love this...
It is...
heated marrow seeping from bone onto thin-as-eggshell fine china...pitch ink pouring from a broken pen leaking onto balmy palms of ivory hands...a bloody-stain splatter on screaming magnolia blossoms
This Is Exquisite!!!!!
Snarky comments-ridl!
Pretentious
Adjective:
1: making claim to or creating an appearance of (often undeserved) importance or distinction; "a pretentious country house"; "a pretentious fraud"; "a pretentious scholarly edition"
I don't think I've ever seen a poem Selene has put out tgat tries to pretend to be more than it is. All that I have read have been fantastic, tripping the light fantastic, but none of them have 'airs'. Selene, don't listen to the one or two noisemakers that want to be noticed for something other than their writing. Let them roll off your back to be trodden on the floor of mediocrity.
rapid passionate painter spot on to make the insanity content
the font hmmmmmm well honestly wouldn't matter
I saw colors swooping lines to letters to words to this poem
so obviously and as always awesome job selene
thinking you may have amended the font?? Nevermind that..this is another awesome piece..your metaphor, meter, rhyme, is impeccable..you obviously have a style all your own and it shouts sensuality, intelligence, boldness..little wonder your published.. just jealous...!!
this is amazing... like a dam holding creative, powerful words blown off..... the flow is unstoppable... awesome work of talent... metaphors, vocabulary... everything at its best....
This poem to me reminded me of creating something...from
start to finish...sculpting clay on a wheel, feeling the texture
in ones hands, the design in the mind.
I love these lines:she pours the night
working it past her throat
into her mouth
shedding
to know your meaning and location of mind..?... the vernacular journey is splendid no doubt.. I find myself jubilant and perplexed simultaneously, which truly is an engaging feeling.. you puzzle me, and I mean that in the greatest of ways..