Liquid Braille~

I learned you

each of you

first

in an amniotic world

with a flutter

like an inside kiss from butterfly

 

The first one pressed her hips against my hip bone

a fluid umbilicus

filled with whispering rushes

she said

I will teach you patience

and unconditional love

 

She did . . . .

 

The second one bent her brow against my ribs

her pulse a steady murmur

in a silver artery that ran my belly

she said

I will teach you to trust again

and give you a banquet of childhood

you never had

 

She did . . . .

 

The third one pressed his palm against my abdomen

my eyes dilated

aching for tear ducts

as I read his life through my fingertips

he said

I don't belong to you

but thank you for the haven of your body

I will teach you complete selflessness

 

He did

in liquid Braille . . . .

 

 

 

copyright:2010vssmd/pa.inc

ALL RIGHTS RESERVED

 

excerpt from the upcoming

to be released August 2010

Reviews

[Gracie-San]

Wow, this was absolutely extraordinary.

That being said, I'm not entirely sure what this poem is about. Maybe I have to read it again (and again) to understand it, but the prose is beautiful and the thought behind it is beautiful as well. It flows so well and has great sensory imagery.

I loved it.

[Jonathan Ballam]

A simple story profoundly told. You have an inspiring artist's eye.

Thanks for sharing ;)

[DrSprinkz73]

I'm sure you always get WOW reviews but yur writing is SO amazing Selene. I was reading this and just felt this over whelming power wash over me I was close to tears by the end of this.. I'm at a loss as to what to say

[Taylor H.]

This was a wonderful poem! the title was very interesting.

[...]

. excruciating ... there is so much to learn ... to see ... to sense ... to be sensitive to ... this goes straight to the core of the soul ... etched in black and white ... some shades of grey ... a riveting poetic reminder ... validating all that needs to be validated ... and reflecting thoughtful and poignant pauses ... beautifully felt, received and written ... and transmitted ...

[Alicante lullaby]

beautiful and witty...shows mother side of you...and the last lines indeed are sad.

[Seashell]

Very clever Selene. I felt sadness after the last few lines but realised that's how we all begin to comprehend and learn from others, in situations which may be right or indeed wrong.

Thanks for share...I hope you recieved my comment on what makes a girl melt...mmmm (My laptop is being naughty and some things have gone amiss)

Take care
Babsie xx

[Black_Rabbit]

Extraordinary.
p.s. what does amniotic and umbilicus mean?

[Amelia Harris]

I'm not a very good judge of poetry, but this is very beautiful :)

[Roselyn]

Amazing work. This is very intricate and worded perfectly... So beautiful. You are a true writer. Excellent write.

~Roselyn