Daisy Chain~

He loves me

he wants to eat the monster straight out of me

he loves me not like you

he doesn’t understand how I crave the bruises too

He loves me

he needs to rip the madness right out of me

he loves me like a killer

drains my berry blood until my animal grows dimmer

He loves me

he wants to cut the freedom straight out of me

he loves me like a brute

smashes every dream within my mouth until I’m mute

He loves me

he needs to tear the woman right out of me

he loves me like a storm

uprooting me from earth to bend, to whirl, perform

He loves me

he needs to smash the w***e, the Venus, right out of me

he loves me like a hardened god

and in so doing lost it all

he loves me

he loves me not

 

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Reviews

[dovetailer]

It's hard to understand some things...why some dysfunctional relationships continue...as if love and hate abut one another...a safe word was established, spoken and ignored...that anything redeemable could be salvaged from snarling mouth and pounding fists...hard to imagine the appeal of the brutal man but you write it with such eloquence in spite of the damage done...that is what makes you stand alone...without peer...in my opinion

[Andrew Wright]

Ambiance for the soul... I drink it in every time. Again... thank you

[Michael X]

phenomonal beat poetry Selene, I loved the absolute originality. the meaning
is one of abuse and render, such a sasd scenerio that no one deserves,
it felt as every sentence was crafted with perfection. keep it up :)

[Morning Star]

So beautiful and writing so eloquent
As I read this poem I couldn’t help imagine
A man who is abusive and controlling and a woman who
Is very confuses about what love truly is,
But his so controlling that now this woman believes
This is love how this often
Happens in an abusive relationship
I love the imagery and flow and the message within
Brilliant write!!
Wishing You Peace Love and Light…….Yolie

[BrokenJuliet]

That was so beautiful I love it.

[Michael Wootton]

hmm well, this poem is very well written, but the story that i have predicted by reading this poem, is abuse to women. it feels like it is about how, even though a women may be beaten by her partner, she cant stop loving him. however, i like how in the end, it feels like you realise that he doesnt love you. is this what the poem is about?

[Crowley]

Sometimes its hard for others to understand what it is we see in someone, sometimes the hole is fillable, sometimes you just keep throwing things in hoping for your own piece of mind to hear something hit bottom to let you know that eventually you will fill it up. Dark and necessary, hardcore, but routine. At some point, everyone has to trade in the beatings for an apartment and a friend to have a glass of wine with. Great write.

[Bubo]

I think I have known this man, the beast, who loves with control ........and this is excellent in its mingled version of what we all did as children, plucking the petals off the daisy, almost for answers, I loved the end for it is true, a beast has no love, and how is it we love them? So many fabulous tasty lines throughout......... but the following lines sum up what has really touched me and made me nod.........

He loves me

he wants to cut the freedom straight out of me

he loves me like a brute

smashes every dream within my mouth until I’m mute

[Ruth]

Excellent spin on the "he loves me, he love me not" :)
"he needs to smash the w***e, the Venus, right out of me",,Wonderful line!
You create a stunning and powerful scene love, the reader gets to the end and then bam! lol Another classic line lol
Excellent work!
xx

[Nancy S.]

Sigh, you gift the world your beautiful voice that enraptures people and makes them comprehend the ugly truths you weave so beautifully through your art...

There is palpable communication between your heart and the mind of the people, creating a balance of expression, appreciation, and change.

And change is what it's all about, isn't it? Your voice creates change, minuscule and scattered random. And isn't that the path of hope??