Daisy Chain~

He loves me

he wants to eat the monster straight out of me

he loves me not like you

he doesn’t understand how I crave the bruises too

He loves me

he needs to rip the madness right out of me

he loves me like a killer

drains my berry blood until my animal grows dimmer

He loves me

he wants to cut the freedom straight out of me

he loves me like a brute

smashes every dream within my mouth until I’m mute

He loves me

he needs to tear the woman right out of me

he loves me like a storm

uprooting me from earth to bend, to whirl, perform

He loves me

he needs to smash the w***e, the Venus, right out of me

he loves me like a hardened god

and in so doing lost it all

he loves me

he loves me not

 

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Reviews

[dovetailer]

It's hard to understand some things...why some dysfunctional relationships continue...as if love and hate abut one another...a safe word was established, spoken and ignored...that anything redeemable could be salvaged from snarling mouth and pounding fists...hard to imagine the appeal of the brutal man but you write it with such eloquence in spite of the damage done...that is what makes you stand alone...without peer...in my opinion

[heich]

perfect..

[FireWoman]

A merry-go-round relationship that had more to do with the abuser than it does the abused. I almost pity men like him- almost. Strikingly raw Selene.

[paul]

rhymes so well written , I hardly noticed them :)

[paul]

he wants to eat the monster straight out of me - powerful!
-and rip the madness out too
-he loves me like a killer - Now that s beautiful!

Here i stop quoting or i ll just
copy the whole poem because each line growls.
growls like a tiger

[Desert Dreamer]

You have said it well, this is the way to take away the love, to drain all the self out of a woman until there is nothing left...this is the description of an abusive relationship...chilling and well written.

[Alicante lullaby]

you describe the parallax of love well.

[TAO]

OMFG!!!! Goddess, wow! Sorry, forgive what seems to be an over-exaggeration of my excitement and reading this... But...damn... This...is...AMAZING... I'm right there with Ashley Beth... The entire poem was brilliant. It was better than brilliant.

The point this poem makes is a good one (of course you know that). The love of a man hell bent on destroying you isn't a love at all...or is it? Whatever it is, this is one of the realest poems (disregarding your fantastic imagery) that I've had the opportunity to read. I almost feel blessed.

[ashley]

Brilliant poem. I loved this so much. I won't copy my favorite lines, because I'd just end up copying the entire poem. I love the coloring, the big letters, the repitition, the imagery... it's all so well done. Fantastic job! It's going in my favorites. :D

[Pax Analog]

This lean direct iron poem displays its ironic hinge with
"he doesn't understand how I crave the bruises too."

For that line reveals an S/M frisson that makes this expression of sexual/violent bluntness subtler. The poet is riding a desire for this hardened god, even to the point of craving bruises, but he goes too far with his smashmouth lust-ravaging.

It becomes abuse instead of S/M rough play because "he doesn't understand how I crave the bruises too" -- like rough-grown flowers not bone-crushing demolition. An important ambiguity, subtler than most would notice.

Violenzia d'amour deadens, kills love-desire via a fundamental obtuseness re a bloodflower paradox.

Brilliant subtlety illumines blunt fury gone cold.

[FocusedAmnesia]

"drains my berry blood until my animal grows dimmer" is definitely my favorite line. I love your pieces. There is so much emotion pouring out of them.