Life As Ocean~

Life as ocean

falling down

submerge

feet first into epic  blue

jellyfish, a string of bioluminescent memories around the waist

translucent scales caress a broken shoulder blade

calcify me to the coral

fuse my bones against the bottom

sea shells, pink

come, like whispers

to lay conch swirls of  a kiss against the breasts

my hair in waves

floating

a white silk cloud

 captures a dolphin’s attention

upright against my body

like a waltz,  he spins me a tidal movement

coaxing me to breathe

but I am turning water over inside my lungs

foam between my lips

a slender ribbon opens from a blood bubble breath

my thighs fuse

music curves my spine

a whale on a harpoon above

thrashing in a watercolor sky of oil

peel me

iridescent scale by scale

a starfish  melody crawling the sandy bottom

I bend

I open

the center like a fruit

seeds everywhere

a nurse shark opens her mouth

a diamond mask floating in seaweed

I burst

gushing silver water

bleeding starscapes

dreamscapes

curled in a whispering shell

on the bottom

of the sea

 

 

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 The Surreal Stalks And Times Of A GutterGirl  

Reviews

[Seraph Trend]

I enjoy the freedom you take by dividing the poem into lines. Your thoughts are scattered yet there is direction overall. You play with the words like a dolphin beneath the waves. I like it -0 }0-
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[RainQueen]

Oh - This story...
The reader can see vividly this girl with her white-floating hair transform into the gleaming mermaid, can feel her peel open. We wince as she bursts, and we weep as she sinks again, hoping for the dolphin to come revive her yet again.

Mystical, watery beauty, and a hauntingly gorgeous tale.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh so you are a mermaid? That explains a lot... seriously the poem sounds like a dream one would have when one is overwhelmed by too many issues at one time. But your imagery and the way you portray it is superb and psychedelic.

[SkinlessFrank]

when the oceans are emptied, we'll still dream about the gentle rise and fall of the fin, the sudden surfacing of a creature that we turn to see but only catch the ripples of the water...this power can also be stilled by iron and steel piercing muscle quivering fibres ... the images you paint are tragic and beauty

[OT]

lol yearly revival?? haha love - "bleeding starcapes, dreamscapes, curled in a whispering shell (wow) on the bottom of the sea" - I love the sea and thus poems about it - but a seleney poem beats all others! nice!

[Aidz]

Wonderful coloUrful lyrical dreamscapes abound in this treasured scribe... from a grain if sand to the pearl that this write became.... Aquaman would enjoy this as did I

[Kerry O'Connor]

What a beautiful infusion of the soul with the ocean.

[Robyn]

beautiful word choices throughout.
i especially liked the line "feet first into epic blue"
i also like the way the poem flows

[Robin]

the sensation of water is magical , however I love this line " music curves my spine " your words curve my imagination ...

[Antonio Valentino]

Oh my god... this is the first piece of your's I've had the pleasure of reviewing, and I absolutely adore it!

Its not often when I am this overwhelmed by such creativity, and talent, you have such a unique sense beauty and all things wondrous, this was more then mere poetry, it was frozen fire, and melting wind.

Outstanding!
Antonio xx