The Rain!

A Poem by Chandra Sekhar Vedula

Just penned down the thoughts which popped up into my mind when watching the amazing rain on a beautiful rainy day. (Written on 29th Sept 2012, at Visakhapatnam.)

Standing at the balcony, thinking of my mistress,

only waiting for you, like a man in distress;

looking at the end, for your mere arrival,

oh baby oh... you are never my rival.

You have always been, the unrelenting charm,

giving the strength, to the needy farm;

wonder how, you make us so romantic,

oh baby oh... you descend so dramatic.

You do help, soup songs blossom,

and make some guys, sing just awesome;

you give us joy, when we are in vain,

oh baby oh... you lovely rain!

© 2015 Chandra Sekhar Vedula

Author's Note

My first poem!! honest reviews and suggestions please!

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Shreyas Tripathy

To start with ... Very well written !!! Congrats !!
I found a few flaws though... you've started with "his" ... then in the 4th line you've used "my"
Then the line "you are never my rival" should have been in past .. you know "you were never my rival" or infact it could by "you were never HIS rival"
Except that ... an incredible first attempt !!

Posted 12 Years Ago

2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

12 Years Ago

thnx buddy :) il keep those in mind!

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Sami Khalil

You give us joy,
when we are in vain.
A nice write.

Posted 12 Years Ago

Abdur Raqeeb

Fantastic Poem! You have greatly penned down your feelings about the rain.

P.S Even I am from AP and have to agree with you that rain is just a beautiful sight in some places.