hold on to you

6 months had gone but you have stayed
not beside me but in my memory a vision you made
a dark alley i visit every night
to know what i did wrong to know
what i did right
puzzle in my head i cant solve
in everything in my mind you are involve
the beat is killing me,beat of my heart
cause in every pump of it i be sure that
it is not a dream we are really apart

you have won me by your first dance
just looking at you gives me my pleasure
gives me my romance
but he is watching dont move
dont even make a sound or give him a proof
complications just wont stop
by every season comes by every drop

i just want to feel you around me
i dont care i just wana feel your lips
i dont wana kiss i just want to feel this 
to die in your touch i miss

lalalala i had him for a while
lalalala i used to say he is mine
but now i wish my number he would dial
and now i dont think i can hold on to him

Reviews

[Dushyant Thadani]

Who doesn't yearn for true love. But if you learn to move on from your previous relationships or crushes, you will be much more happier. It was well written but I do think that you can write much better and that would definitely come with experience. So great job and I hope to read many more poems from you.

[AloysiaVerben]

Oh, I like this :D It's cute. I don't know if it's meant to be cute but I thought it was cute :) But then again I am just the tiniest bit strange ;)