Listen

Listen!

Can you hear it

It is here

Or is it there

It's everywhere

In my hair

In that chair

Whispering in your ear

Telling you who to fear

Can you hear it

Are you scared

Does it sting

Is it near

It's right here

Can you hear it

What does it say

Will you listen

Do you dare 

What's out there

That's not fair

Tell me why

Tell me where

Can you find it 

Is it there

Can you hear it 

Listen!

Reviews

[Nigel Newman]

How interesting that this can be read both as a children's poem and also as something far more sinister. Do you mind if I point out a couple of things?
- Its right here - should be It's
- Do you dear - I'm guessing you meant to write 'dare'

Back to its overall feel. I can 'hear' A A Milne (Winnie the Pooh and Christopher Robin) quite clearly. But at the same time I can't quite shake the sinister edge. Very clever!

Regards
Nigel

[Cara]

Thank you Nigel i'm going to correct it right away
i've read this poem after writing it million times and i knew that something was missing or wrong but i never noticed
im glad you liked the poem XD

[Nigel Newman]

If you wrote it in Word or Pages or something similar, watch out when you copy paste into WC. Check the punctuation, for example. I've seen full stops become strange floating symbols. Also look at line breaks.

Basically, don't trust WC to present it in the way you intended. Double-check everything!!! (Written from bitter experience ...!)

[Cara]

yes sometimes this happens X.X

[emipoemi]

This is a fun bit of absurdity, if such I may call it. It's mysterious in its subject ambiguity, but it also a bit humorous in its frantic questioning and snappy lines that rhyme at the most random moments. Well done!

[Cara]

Thank you XD

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the poem. You left the reader with some questions. Can you hear? Sometime whispers can lead us to wrong places and decisions. I like the tone and the directness of the words. Thank you Cara for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Cara]

thank you for reading, glad you liked it

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy and you are welcome Cara.